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Teenagers work experience and money

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Unlike adults teenagers are the essence of our future. As a parent, teacher or a mentor we should guide and help them to enhance their skills to grantee that we will have a bright future led by them. However, there have been a lot of opinions states that teenagers should work part-time to earn money. On the other side some people argue that teenagers shouldn’t sacrifice their rest and after school activities to work. In my opinion teenagers shouldn’t waste their time after school on work. The school life for a high school students these days take a lot of time and effort from the student. The school make sure to maintain the knowledge and extend the knowledge gaining even after school by giving the students some homework’s and task and these tasks are time consuming as much as they are knowledgeable. It would be unfair to take the last time left to work in their days when they weren’t able to do something else than resting well to maintain higher energy for tomorrow’s education. Surprisingly, a lot of people argued that teenagers should work part-time jobs to earn money. From my perspective I don’t support this opinion. As I stated earlier the students in our generation don’t get enough time to rest and as a result of that they if we put them under job pressure they will fall apart. On the contrary, teenagers should enjoy the small amount of free time of their life so when the time of their responsibility comes they will be ready to step up and take the rule of our future leaders healthily. In the end, In my perspective The students shouldn’t be allowed to work for earning money. However, they should stick to their responsibilities that match their age and skills properly.
Unlike adults
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teenagers
are the essence of our future. As a parent, teacher or a mentor we should guide and
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help
them to enhance their
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skills
to grantee that we will have a bright future led by them.
However
, there have been
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a lot of
opinions states that
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teenagers
should
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work
part-time to earn money. On the other side
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some
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people
argue that
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teenagers
shouldn’t sacrifice their rest and after
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school
activities to work.

In my opinion
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teenagers
shouldn’t waste their
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time
after
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school
on
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work
. The
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school
life for a high
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school
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students
these days take
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a lot of
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time
and effort from the
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student
. The
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school
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make
sure to maintain the knowledge and extend the knowledge gaining even after
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school
by giving the
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students
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some
homework’s and task and these tasks are
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time consuming
as much as they are knowledgeable. It would be unfair to take the last
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time
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left
to
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work
in their days when they weren’t able to do something
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than resting well to maintain higher energy for tomorrow’s education.

Surprisingly
,
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a lot of
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people
argued that
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teenagers
should
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work
part-time jobs to earn money. From my perspective I don’t support this opinion. As I stated earlier the
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students
in our generation don’t
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get
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enough
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time
to rest and
as a result
of that they if we put them under job pressure they will fall apart.
On the contrary
,
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teenagers
should enjoy the
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small
amount of free
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time
of their life
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so
when the
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time
of their responsibility
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comes
they will be ready to step up and take the
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rule
of our future leaders
healthily
.

In the
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end
, In my perspective The
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students
shouldn’t be
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allowed
to
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work
for earning money.
However
, they should stick to their responsibilities that match their age and
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skills
properly
.
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IELTS essay Teenagers work experience and money

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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