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Technology plays significant role in our life

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The 21st of century is the age of technology. It is considered that technology is significant to human's development and brings several possibilities. However, technology has also caused diversity of negative effects, such as escalation of numbers of people who lead sedentary lifestyle and decrease rapidly of workforce in certain field. However, I completely agree that technology might be beneficial in various realms by making life much more eassier and adds to improvement of pupils academic skills, especially for language learners. First of all, technology is valuable invention in educational field especially for people who are learning foreign language. Utilizing technology makes studying language much more easier. Students can increase learning quality via using the internet or mobile devices. Mainly, the internet provides user with substantialinformation that can be necessary for them. As a result, learners might gain profound knowledge. In addition to that, technology has also made human beings' life easy especially in communication. People can communicate within seconds by using different gadgets, mobile and computer. People have have a great opportunity to contact with relatives, friends abroad. For example, according to the latest data, 80% of people are using Facebook to chat with the others. In spite of numerous benefits of technology there are harmful sides. One of them is sedentary lifestyle which cause them to be obese, heart disease and a variety of other physical health conditions. Consequently, the number of death among people has increased dramatically. Apart from this life of human beings becomes robotic. Technological advances have replaced people in the workplace and this may cause to reduce staff. For instance, according to the statistics, there has been increasing number of unemployment. In conclusion, despite the drawbacks of the modern devices, I strongly believe that technology might bring much more boons rather than negative ones.
The 21st of century is the age of
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technology
. It
is considered
that
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technology
is significant to human's development and brings several possibilities.
However
,
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technology
has
also
caused diversity of
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negative
effects, such as escalation of numbers of
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people
who lead sedentary lifestyle and decrease
rapidly
of workforce in certain field.
However
, I completely
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agree
that
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technology
might be beneficial in various realms by making life much more
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eassier
and
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adds
to improvement of pupils academic
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skills
,
especially
for language learners.

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First of all
,
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technology
is valuable invention in educational field
especially
for
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people
who are learning foreign language. Utilizing
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technology
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makes
studying language much
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more easier
. Students can increase learning quality via using the internet or mobile devices.
Mainly
, the internet provides user with
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substantialinformation
that can be necessary for them.
As a result
, learners might gain profound knowledge.
In addition
to that,
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technology
has
also
made human beings' life easy
especially
in communication.
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People
can communicate within seconds by using
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different
gadgets, mobile and computer.
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People
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have have
a great opportunity to contact with relatives, friends abroad.
For example
, according to the latest data, 80% of
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people
are using Facebook to chat with the others.

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In spite of
numerous benefits of
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technology
there are harmful sides. One of them
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is sedentary
lifestyle which cause them to be obese, heart disease and a variety of other physical health conditions.
Consequently
, the number of death among
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people
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has
increased
dramatically
. Apart from this life of human beings becomes robotic. Technological advances have replaced
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people
in the workplace and this may cause to
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reduce
staff.
For instance
, according to the statistics, there has been increasing number of unemployment.

In conclusion
, despite the drawbacks of the modern devices, I
strongly
believe that
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technology
might bring much more boons
rather
than
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negative
ones.
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IELTS essay Technology plays significant role in our life

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300 words
6.0
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