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Technology makes the life for logetuvity

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In today's world, it is irrefutable to say that, technology is indispensible part of human race. Because of advancement in science the medical facilities are magnificent and easily accessible for every one. As a result, people have long life as that of the past. I believe that, improvement in medical care have more merits than demerits. On the one hand, there are numerous advantages of higher life expectancy. First and the foremost is, because of better health care older people can live for longer term. Senior citizen have to encountered with enormous health menace which can be easily solved by medical hospitality. They play an imperative role in the society and thus must be take care of. Besides this, they inculcate a lot of moral as well as ethical values within the children. For example, according to the report in Hindustan Times, the nation with good ratio of older people has advanced as compared to the countries who have not. A part from this, it also provides treatment for sever diseases such as cancer, cardiac arrest, covid -19 which finally results in decreasing the mortality rate of people. Besides this, the people who came across with accidents can get the privilege from this which ultimately increase the life of human. To elucidate an example, according to bharat biotech it has been prove that because of advancement in technology India can easily produced the vaccine for fatal diseases called coronavirus. However, there are some repercussion of this as well. Due to the good medical facilities hospitals are accesible for each and everyone which creates an imbalance between death rate and birth rate and because of this there is an escalation in world's population. By doing so, the government could not caters the need of their own citizen. To recapitulate, it can be said that, improvement in health care have been booming drastically which assist the people to live longer but we can not ignored its bane as well.
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today
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indispensible
part of human race.
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Because
of advancement in science the
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medical
facilities are magnificent and
easily
accessible for every one.
As a result
,
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people
have long life as that of the past. I believe that, improvement in
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medical
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care
have more merits than demerits.

On the one hand, there are numerous advantages of higher life expectancy.
First
and the foremost is,
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because
of better health
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care
older
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people
can
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live
for longer term. Senior citizen
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have to
encountered with enormous health menace which can be
easily
solved by
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medical
hospitality. They play an imperative role in the society and
thus
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must
be take
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care
of.
Besides
this, they inculcate
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a lot of
moral
as well
as ethical values within the children.
For example
, according to the report in Hindustan Times, the nation with
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good
ratio of older
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people
has advanced as compared to the countries who have not.

A part from this, it
also
provides treatment for sever diseases such as cancer, cardiac arrest,
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covid
-19 which
finally
results in decreasing the mortality rate of
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people
.
Besides
this, the
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people
who came across with accidents can
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get
the privilege from this which
ultimately
increase the life of human. To elucidate an example, according to
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bharat
biotech it has been
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prove
that
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because
of advancement in technology India can
easily
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produced
the vaccine for fatal diseases called coronavirus.

However
, there are
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some
repercussion of this
as well
. Due to the
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good
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medical
facilities hospitals are
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accesible
for each and
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everyone
which creates an imbalance between death rate and birth rate and
because of this
there is an escalation in world's population. By doing
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so
, the
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government
could not
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caters
the need of their
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own
citizen.

To recapitulate, it can
be said
that, improvement in health
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care
have been booming
drastically
which assist the
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people
to
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live
longer
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but
we can not
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ignored
its bane
as well
.
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IELTS essay Technology makes the life for logetuvity

Essay
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5 paragraphs
327 words
5.5
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