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Technology makes people less interactive

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Technology has surely made its mark on the world. There have been tremendous changes in all the fields. In fact, it has gadgets are inevitable in today’s scenario. They pose severe risks and benefits to a person’s life just like everything else. We must assess both the parameters before making them an important part of our lives. As the statement says, technology has truly made social interaction less. This takes a toll on our mental health and leaves us unprepared for the real world. Socially unaware people find it hard to belong in the community. Nowadays, children begin to use gadgets from a very young age. They are not given a chance to realize the importance of social responsibility and interaction. They are also prone to cybercrime. In the competitive environment today, it is necessary for us to be socially interactive. However, social media and gadgets themselves proved to have positive effects as well. Provided one has proper control over these, they can effortlessly make social interaction much better. Social apps such as Facebook, Instagram, Tinder, etc. are platforms where we can find lost friends and meet new ones. During the pandemic time, when we cannot meet people in person, these apps have kept us in touch with our loved ones. Thus, gadgets, when used with a limit, can improve social interaction. It improves our confidence and as a whole enhances our mental health. Overuse, though, will undoubtedly put us in a hard situation.
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made its mark on the world. There have been tremendous
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changes
in all the fields. In fact, it has
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gadgets
are inevitable in
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today
’s scenario. They pose severe
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risks
and benefits to a person’s life
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just
like everything else. We
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must
assess both the parameters
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before
making them an
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important
part of our
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lives
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truly
made
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social
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interaction
less. This takes a toll on our mental health and
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leaves
us unprepared for the real world.
Socially
unaware
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people
find it
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hard
to belong in the community. Nowadays, children
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begin
to
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use
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gadgets
from a
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very
young age. They are not
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given
a chance to realize the importance of
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social
responsibility and
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interaction
. They are
also
prone to cybercrime. In the competitive environment
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today
, it is necessary for us to be
socially
interactive.

However
,
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social
media and
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gadgets
themselves proved to have
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positive
effects
as well
. Provided one has proper control over these, they can
effortlessly
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make
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social
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interaction
much better.
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Social
apps such as Facebook, Instagram, Tinder, etc. are platforms where we can find lost friends and
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meet
new ones. During the pandemic time, when we cannot
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meet
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people
in person, these apps have
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kept
us in touch with our
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loved
ones.

Thus
,
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gadgets
, when
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used
with a limit, can
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improve
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social
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interaction
. It
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improves
our confidence and as a whole enhances our mental health. Overuse, though, will
undoubtedly
put us in a
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hard
situation.
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IELTS essay Technology makes people less interactive

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
244 words
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