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technology. From my point of view, although advertisements have its own advantages alongside disadvantage

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In today's world, advertisements have gained in popularity among the public due to the advancement of technology. From my point of view, although advertisements have its own advantages alongside disadvantages, I firmly believe that this is a negative development. The growth of advertisements has some undeniable benefits. To begin with, using advertisements can help a brand or a company to gain more exposure to the media. Whether using celebrities or other ways of promotion, companies can be benefited in terms of popularity and furthermore an increase of sales. Secondly, advertisements can help to create more jobs such as content creators or designers. As a result, this can improve the financial state of not only the employees but also the company. Conversely, advertisements also have their own significant drawbacks. First and foremost, through advertising, people with malicious intentions may take advantage of this and spread misleading information. As a result, people, especially adolescents, can be exposed to these kinds of messages. Secondly, rapid growth of advertisements is equivalent to an unhealthy attitude of social hierarchy. Promotion of luxury items can cause people to associate goods from these brand with higher social status, therefore, cause the discrimination among most members of society. For instance, those who use more affordable, locally known brands are viewed as poorer or less fashionable. Therefore, the noticeable drawbacks of advertisements should not be overlooked. In conclusion, while the benefits of advertisements related to products' exposure and job creation are noticeable, its drawbacks are more significant. Therefore, I firmly believe that the rapid growth of advertisements is overall a negative development.
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have gained in popularity among the public due to the advancement of technology. From my point of view, although
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has
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some
undeniable benefits. To
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begin
with, using
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can
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help
a brand or a
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company
to gain more exposure to the media. Whether using celebrities or other ways of promotion,
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companies
can
be benefited
in terms of popularity and
furthermore
an increase of sales.
Secondly
,
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advertisements
can
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help
to create more jobs such as content creators or designers.
As a result
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improve
the financial state of not
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only
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also
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company
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Conversely
,
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also
have their
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own
significant drawbacks.
First
and foremost, through advertising,
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people
with malicious intentions may take advantage of this and spread misleading information.
As a result
,
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people
,
especially
adolescents, can
be exposed
to these kinds of messages.
Secondly
, rapid growth of
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advertisements
is equivalent to an unhealthy attitude of social hierarchy. Promotion of luxury items can cause
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to associate
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goods
from these brand with higher social status,
therefore
, cause the discrimination among most members of society.
For instance
, those who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
more affordable,
locally
known brands
are viewed
as poorer or less fashionable.
Therefore
, the noticeable drawbacks of
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advertisements
should not
be overlooked
.

In conclusion
, while the benefits of
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advertisements
related to products' exposure and job creation are noticeable, its drawbacks are more significant.
Therefore
, I
firmly
believe that the rapid growth of
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advertisements
is
overall
a
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negative
development.
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IELTS essay technology. From my point of view, although advertisements have its own advantages alongside disadvantage

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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