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Percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organnizations.

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First of all, it can be seen a great group of Canadians between 18 to 49 gave more money in 2000 than in 2015. Nevertheless, in 2015 the donor rate only increased in the 50 to 64 Canadians'group. In 2000, the number of charitable donations were increasing from 20% to 35. 5%. On the other hand, by 2015 it is noted the 18 to 24 group had a 10% decrease. It is generally believed that older people are those who have more contributions to charity than younger people. But, it is observed that in 200 young people considered making their donations to charity. However, older people in 2000 decreased their contributions to charity. To summarise, it can be said that there is a balanced donation between the two groups. For example, in 2000 and in 2015 there is just a minor difference among the donators, it can be said it only. 5 percentage.

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