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Should governments regulate the way that buildings are constructed by individuals in society What are the advantages and disadvantages of this policy v.1

Should governments regulate the way that buildings are constructed by individuals in society What are the advantages and disadvantages of this policy v. 1
Over the past 40 years, the disparity between rich and poor communities has increased dramatically. Unequal distribution of wealth is one of the common problems faced by developing nations. This can lead to poverty. For instance, fertile farmland. The wealth of this type is zero-sum. This also creates a significant rift between the wealthy and the poor and leads to many social problems. Economic disparity not only affects the lives of the people, but also hinders the overall economic development of a nation. The ministry should always strive towards minimizing this gap. If we look at the problems caused by this phenomenon, we will find a number of issues. One of the main problems caused by unequal distribution of wealth is that education has become inaccessible to the poor. Nowadays quality study has become very expensive. There are a list of schools and colleges which are very costly and not within the reach of poor people. Due to this, these people are not able to compete for high paying jobs and it becomes a fundamental disadvantage for them. Another important issue is the expansion in crime rates. As marginalized groups most often do not make enough money to meet their basic needs, they resort to heinous acts like burglary, theft etc. Although these issues are critical, it is possible to find solutions. In fact, there are various instances where solutions have been provided by the government itself. First of all, several low-income groups cannot afford education. Thus, governments must ensure learning and employment opportunities should be given to poor and every person in the country must be educated at least until undergraduate, by allocating appropriate funds. Individuals and companies can also contribute some amount for this purpose from their personal income. It should develop schemes and provide scholarships, which will help people from the poor section afford a quality discipline. This will give them a fair chance to compete with rich people. Reserving seats for marginalized group or quota system can also be one of the solutions. In addition, authorities should encourage and endeavour entrepreneurship among underprivileged sects. For instance, it has introduced many schemes to empower the poor. Secondly, the employment awareness should be increased among the poor. The government can reserve some jobs and seminars for the poor to ensure their well-being. To sum up, the differences between the rich and the poor is widening and has created many problems like an expansion in crime rates. However, if the authority exercises enough political willpower, it is possible to solve these problems.
Over the past 40 years, the disparity between rich and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
communities has increased
dramatically
. Unequal distribution of wealth is one of the common
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problems
faced by developing nations. This can lead to poverty.
For instance
, fertile farmland. The wealth of this type is zero-sum. This
also
creates a significant rift between the wealthy and the
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poor
and leads to
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many
social
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problems
. Economic disparity not
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only
affects the
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lives
of the
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people
,
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but
also
hinders the
overall
economic development of a nation. The ministry should always strive towards minimizing this gap. If we look at the
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problems
caused by this phenomenon, we will find a number of issues.

One of the main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
caused by unequal distribution of wealth is that education has become inaccessible to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
. Nowadays quality study has become
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
expensive. There are a list of schools and colleges which are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
costly and not within the reach of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
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people
. Due to this, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are not able to compete for high paying jobs and it becomes a fundamental disadvantage for them. Another
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important
issue is the expansion in crime rates. As marginalized groups most
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often
do not
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make
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enough
money to
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meet
their basic needs, they resort to heinous acts like burglary, theft etc.

Although these issues are critical, it is possible to find solutions. In fact, there are various instances where solutions have
been provided
by the
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government
itself.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, several low-income groups cannot afford education.
Thus
,
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governments
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must
ensure learning and employment opportunities should be
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given
to
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poor
and every person in the country
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must
be educated
at least until undergraduate, by allocating appropriate funds. Individuals and
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companies
can
also
contribute
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some
amount for this purpose from their personal income. It should develop schemes and provide scholarships, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
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people
from the
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poor
section afford a quality discipline. This will give them a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
chance to compete with rich
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people
. Reserving seats for marginalized group or quota system can
also
be one of the solutions.
In addition
, authorities should encourage and
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endeavour
entrepreneurship among underprivileged sects.
For instance
, it has introduced
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
schemes to empower the
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poor
.
Secondly
, the employment awareness should
be increased
among the
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poor
. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can reserve
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
jobs and seminars for the
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poor
to ensure their well-being.

To sum up, the differences between the rich and the
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poor
is widening and has created
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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problems
like an expansion in crime rates.
However
, if the authority exercises
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enough
political willpower, it is possible to solve these
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problems
.
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IELTS essay Should governments regulate the way that buildings are constructed by individuals in society What are the advantages and disadvantages of this policy v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
423 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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