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Teaching Moral Values to the Youngster

Teaching Moral Values to the Youngster AJ08w
Nowadays, moral decadence to the youngsters has become a crucial problem that faces society. Based on the data from the Indonesian child protection commission in 2019, the number of children in conflict with the law reached 1. 251 cases. There are several cases that were done by the teenagers such as crime, violence, married by accident, bullying, gangster, drugs, free sex, etc. Although there are so many factors that cause children to conflict with the law, I believe that moral decadence in our environment is the major cause of those problems. The first and most important reason for teaching moral values to the youngsters is in line with the laws of Republic of Indonesia No. 2 at 1989, article 4. From that law, it can be seen that the national education is arranged to create human resources who are smart, skilled, have a good character, independent, religious, responsible to the environment and to the nation.
Nowadays, moral decadence to the youngsters has become a crucial problem that faces society. Based on the data from the Indonesian child protection commission in 2019, the number of children in conflict with the
law
reached 1. 251 cases. There are several cases that
were done
by the
teenagers
such as crime, violence, married by accident, bullying, gangster, drugs, free sex, etc. Although there are
so
many
factors that cause children to conflict with the
law
, I believe that moral decadence in our environment is the major cause of those problems.

The
first
and most
important
reason for teaching moral values to the youngsters is in line with the
laws
of Republic of Indonesia No. 2 at 1989, article 4. From that
law
, it can be
seen
that the national education
is arranged
to create human resources who are smart, skilled, have a
good
character, independent, religious, responsible to the environment and to the nation.
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IELTS essay Teaching Moral Values to the Youngster

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