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Teaching History In Schools

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I totally disagree with this statement and personally i don't have any objection with teaching history as a subject in schools. Because history is an important thing to know that each an every compatriot. The history is teaches us many more lessons from the past. And it shows the arrogance about the nation. For instance, wordly we're seeing the proud of pyramids and great china wall. Those are giving us a great message and big lesson about the old human's power and tremendous knowledge about them. Mostly histories are written by war winners and its mainly bassed on legendary, chronicles, victories and assassinations. However we can't trust the historical details at all the time. Because we have insufficient informations and evidence to proof that. So we have to pursue the occurrences by collecting the references and need to do the experiments. This is why my suggestion is we need to teach history as a subject in schools. Somehow in this contemporary young society always looking to find out new methodological and technologically suiting jobs to them. In by and large this is why young generation doesn't concern about chronical things. However jobs and carriers selecting and keep doing work on in, most wanted thing is person ability and own skills. So whoever want to brush up their skills they will do that themselves. It's more often depend on their interesting. Eventually my opinion is we need to teach history as a subject in schools and we want to spend time an equally how we giving the priority to other subjects.
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totally
disagree with this statement and
personally
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i
don't have any objection with teaching
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history
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is an
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important
thing to know that each an every compatriot.

The
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history
is teaches us
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many
more lessons from the past. And it
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shows
the arrogance about the nation.
For instance
,
wordly
we're seeing
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the proud of
pyramids and great china wall. Those are giving us a great message and
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big
lesson about the
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old
human's power and tremendous knowledge about them.

Mostly
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histories
are written
by war winners and its
mainly
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bassed
on legendary, chronicles, victories and assassinations.
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However
we can't trust the historical
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details
at all the time.
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Because
we have insufficient
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informations
and evidence to proof that.

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So
we
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have to
pursue the occurrences by collecting the references and need to do the experiments. This is why my suggestion is we need to teach
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
in schools.

Somehow in this contemporary young society always looking to find out new methodological and
technologically
suiting jobs to them. In by and large this is why young generation doesn't concern about
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chronical
things.

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However
jobs and carriers selecting and
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keep
doing work on in, most wanted thing is person ability and
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own
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
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So whoever
want to brush up their
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skills
they will do that themselves. It's more
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often
depend on their interesting.

Eventually
my opinion is we need to teach
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
as a
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subject
in
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schools and
we want to spend time an
equally
how
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we giving
the priority to other
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subjects
.
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IELTS essay Teaching History In Schools

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
260 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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