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Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.

Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance. XE1KA
Quoting A. P. J Abdul Kalam, “Teaching is a very noble profession that shapes the character, caliber, and future of an individual”. The prompt suggests that students' academic performance should determine the salary received by their respective teacher. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with this suggestion for three reasons. First of all, teachers' income should not be based on their students' capabilities because students’ academic performance depends on their learning capabilities and punishing the teacher by means of their income is inhumane. The current pandemic did not leave a stone turned to hurt every profession, but teaching was most certainly hit hard. As schools everywhere closed up, online teaching started in full swing. While the sudden change in platform would have theoretically seemed as not a big deal, teachers worldwide suffered with a landslide of issues. Increase in apathy and boredom from the students were just some of the factors that ensured a hard time for teachers. This stark change was a difficult one for teachers as well, as navigating an online teaching environment wasn’t necessarily their forte, having been teaching all these years in person. Online learning and its demerits are plentiful. Students academic performance plummeted and the bridge to making our way back to the performance the students’ had pre-pandemic is going to be a challenging one. Teachers are already underpaid, some even below the income poverty line, delayed salaries and cuts in income were some of the horrors the pandemic brought in for teachers. In such a current state, if we reinstate the way teachers are paid and make it directly tethered to their students' academic performance, we would be perpetuating a hostile work environment for teachers, one that doesn’t even pay them enough to even survive. Secondly, the shift in economic class might be another vice teachers face, with some teachers, particularly those in rich school systems, having an unfair advantage over the others in mid to low economic brackets. For example, a high school teacher in London is going to make significantly more money than a teacher in Somalia even if his or her teaching abilities are not on par with the average. Richer students have the advantage of better study material, service and the best of technological devices to boost their academic performance over students in poorer neighborhoods having lesser access to learning materials. Students in poverty tensed areas tend to have higher depression rates with that also being a factor in decreased motivation to study. Their performance in turn alleviated with added pressures of making money to survive, the learning surrounding will most definitely will be negative and discouraged to say the least. In such a case, having teachers’ salaries tied to student performance would be unfair to teachers working equally as hard or even harder in lower income areas pushing the economic gap even further. However, there must exist a mechanism in place that evaluates teachers to ensure a certain level of quality in teaching. For example, an annual or monthly feedback to be taken from students about the teaching style of their teachers which helps keep a check on the teaching level. Such a system will not only weed out the bad teachers but will also ensure the students feel validated for their opinions. With such a balanced system, the teaching staff will be pushed to perform better and a positive competitive spirit will always be prevalent amongst teachers resulting in the betterment of students' performance and grades. But having the teachers take a dip in salaries due to the performance of students would be a cruel stance. In conclusion, the decision of assessing teachers salaries by their students’ performance might be complex one, but I stand firmly with it not being so. Maybe if there was a system in place that would benefit both the teacher and students, with students having a high performance level and teachers upskilling their teaching modes, not hurting the teachers pay, I would fully advocate for it.
Quoting A. P. J Abdul
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noble profession that shapes the character, caliber, and future of an individual”. The prompt suggests that
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students'
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academic
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performance
should determine the
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salary
received by their respective
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teacher
. In my opinion, I
mostly
disagree with this suggestion for three reasons.

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, teachers'
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income
should not
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on their
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students'
capabilities
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students’
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academic
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performance
depends on their
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learning
capabilities and punishing the
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teacher
by means of their
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income
is inhumane. The
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current
pandemic did not
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leave
a stone turned to hurt every profession,
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but
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teaching
was most
certainly
hit
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hard
. As schools everywhere closed up, online
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teaching
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started
in full swing. While the sudden
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change
in platform would have
theoretically
seemed as not a
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big
deal,
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teachers
worldwide suffered with a landslide of issues. Increase in apathy and boredom from the
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students
were
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just
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factors that ensured a
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hard
time for
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teachers
. This stark
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change
was a difficult one for
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teachers
as well
, as navigating an online
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environment wasn’t
necessarily
their forte,
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having
been
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all these years in person. Online
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learning
and its demerits are plentiful.
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Students
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academic
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performance
plummeted and the bridge to making our way back to the
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performance
the
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students’
had
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pre-pandemic
is going to be a challenging one.
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Teachers
are already underpaid,
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some
even below the
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income
poverty line, delayed
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salaries
and
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cuts
in
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income
were
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some of the
horrors the pandemic brought in for
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teachers
. In such a
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current
state, if we reinstate the way
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teachers
are paid
and
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make
it
directly
tethered to their
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students'
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academic
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performance
, we would be perpetuating a hostile work environment for
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teachers
, one that doesn’t even pay them
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enough
to even survive.

Secondly
, the shift in economic
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class
might be another vice
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teachers
face, with
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some
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teachers
,
particularly
those in rich school
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systems
,
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having
an unfair advantage over the others in mid to low economic brackets.
For example
, a high school
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teacher
in London is going to
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make
significantly
more money than a
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teacher
in Somalia even if
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his or her
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teaching
abilities are not on par with the average. Richer
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students
have the advantage of better study material, service and the best of technological devices to boost their
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academic
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performance
over
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students
in poorer neighborhoods
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having
lesser access to
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learning
materials.
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Students
in poverty tensed areas tend to have higher depression rates with that
also
being a factor in decreased motivation to study. Their
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performance
in turn alleviated with
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added
pressures of making money to survive, the
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learning
surrounding will most definitely will be
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negative
and discouraged to say the least. In such a case,
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having
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teachers’
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salaries
tied to
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student
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performance
would be unfair to
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teachers
working
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equally as
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hard
or even harder in lower
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income
areas pushing the economic gap even
further
.

However
, there
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must
exist a mechanism in place that evaluates
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teachers
to ensure a certain level of quality in
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teaching
.
For example
, an annual or monthly feedback to
be taken
from
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students
about the
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teaching
style of their
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teachers
which
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helps
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keep
a
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check
on the
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teaching
level. Such a
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will not
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only
weed out the
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bad
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teachers
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but
will
also
ensure the
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students
feel validated for their opinions. With such a balanced
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system
, the
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teaching
staff will
be pushed
to perform better and a
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positive
competitive spirit will always be prevalent amongst
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teachers
resulting in the betterment of
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students'
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performance
and grades.
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But
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having
the
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teachers
take a dip in
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salaries
due to the
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performance
of
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students
would be a cruel stance.

In conclusion
, the decision of assessing
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teachers
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salaries
by their
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students’
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performance
might be complex one,
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but
I stand
firmly
with it not being
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so
. Maybe if there was a
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system
in place that would benefit both the
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teacher
and
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students
, with
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students
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having
a high
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performance
level and
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teachers
upskilling their
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teaching
modes, not hurting the
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teachers
pay, I would
fully
advocate for it.
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IELTS essay Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.

Essay
  American English
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663 words
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