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Teacher should be evaluated by students. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Teacher should be evaluated by students. v. 1
In the past, teachers were the ones who had right to assess students’ learning, however, nowadays, this point of view is changing. Students should take part in judging teaching quality. I totally agree with this opinion. From my perspective, there are at least two reasons why students should participate in carrying out assessment of teaching quality. Firstly, teaching is like any other job that requires evaluation in the course of working. For instance, when working at a company, employees are assessed by their bosses or managers through their performance in order to determine whether are still eligible to continue working or not, so are the teachers. In addition to the headmaster and teacher council taking part in evaluating the teaching quality, students also should be involved in this process because teachers are the those who convey knowledge to students, thus students are one of those who can accurately assess the quality of teaching. Secondly, student participation in judging the teaching quality may establish equality in the relationship between teachers and students. If students are involved in the evaluation, teachers will be more responsible for the teaching and students may feel that they are treated equally. Having true fairness may motivate students to study better, which makes them feel more confident about giving opinions to build lessons. Consequently, students will easily acquire knowledge, which is considered as a success of teachers. In conclusion, student participation in teacher evaluation brings many benefits and allows students as well as teachers to gain more knowledge and experience.
In the past,
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teachers
were the ones who had right to assess
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students’
learning,
however
, nowadays, this point of view is changing.
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Students
should
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take part
in judging
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teaching
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quality
. I
totally
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agree
with this opinion.

From my perspective, there are at least two reasons why
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students
should participate in carrying out assessment of
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teaching
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quality
.
Firstly
,
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teaching
is like any other job that requires evaluation in the course of working.
For instance
, when working at a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, employees
are assessed
by their bosses or managers through their performance in order to determine whether are
still
eligible to continue working or not,
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so
are the
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teachers
.
In addition
to the headmaster and
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teacher
council taking part in evaluating the
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teaching
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quality
,
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students
also
should
be involved
in this process
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because
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teachers
are the those who convey knowledge to
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students
,
thus
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students
are one of those who can
accurately
assess the
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quality
of teaching.

Secondly
,
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student
participation in judging the
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teaching
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quality
may establish equality in the relationship between
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teachers
and
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students
. If
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students
are involved
in the evaluation,
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teachers
will be more responsible for the
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teaching
and
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students
may feel that they
are treated
equally
. Having true fairness may motivate
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students
to study better, which
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makes
them feel more confident about giving opinions to build lessons.
Consequently
,
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students
will
easily
acquire knowledge, which
is considered
as a success of teachers.

In conclusion
,
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student
participation in
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teacher
evaluation brings
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many
benefits and
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allows
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students
as well
as
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teachers
to gain more knowledge and experience.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Teacher should be evaluated by students. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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