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Task2 questionSmoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solution. v.1

Task2 questionSmoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solution. v. 1
The number of new vehicles being drawn into the road every day is increasing exponentially, due to which, more damage is done to the environment in terms of pollution. Few are of the opinion that, these environmental issues can be overcome by increasing the cost of fuel by the government. I do not agree with the above statement completely and I shall examine different aspects of it in the following paragraphs. Although, there is a possibility of creating an awareness of renewable resources by increasing their price, I am of the opinion that it will not last long. Cost had always been rising for the decades, for example, ten years back, one litre of petrol costed 30 rupees and now it is 73; the number of vehicles did not come down at all. The Government instead must think of other ways of solving issues caused by commuting mediums. Since most of the transportation mediums use exhaustible resources, a strict legislature must be brought in, which mandates the vehicles which use renewable sources. This will not only brings down the impact on our planet, but also gives a possibility of restoration of exhaustible sources. Officials should make sure that these legislative changes are enforced at the grass root level. In conclusion, I pin down my thought, saying that a control on the climatic problems cannot be brought in, unless the government decides to do so. Making these fossil fuels expensive does not fetch us good results as people will learn to afford them.
The number of new vehicles
being drawn
into the road every day is increasing
exponentially
, due to which, more damage
is done
to the environment in terms of pollution. Few are of the opinion that, these environmental issues can
be overcome
by increasing the cost of fuel by the
government
. I do not
agree
with the above statement completely and I shall examine
different
aspects of it in the following paragraphs.

Although, there is a possibility of creating an awareness of renewable resources by increasing their price, I am of the opinion that it will not last long. Cost had always been rising for the decades,
for example
, ten years back, one
litre
of petrol costed 30 rupees and
now
it is 73; the number of vehicles did not
come
down at all. The
Government
instead
must
think
of other ways of solving issues caused by commuting mediums.

Since most of the transportation mediums
use
exhaustible resources, a strict legislature
must
be brought
in, which mandates the vehicles which
use
renewable sources. This will not
only
brings
down the impact on our planet,
but
also
gives a possibility of restoration of exhaustible sources. Officials should
make
sure that these legislative
changes
are enforced
at the grass root level.

In conclusion
, I pin down my
thought
, saying that a control on the climatic problems cannot
be brought
in, unless the
government
decides to do
so
. Making these fossil fuels expensive does not fetch us
good
results as
people
will learn to afford them.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Task2 questionSmoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solution. v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
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