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Task 2 writing, urbanization

Task 2 writing, urbanization O6dnM
Urbanization is defined as increase in population of people living in urban areas. There is no denying that, people in numerous countries are moving away from villages to live in urban areas, rapidly rising the rates of urbanization. The following paragraphs will discuss the reasons for this shift as well as the difficulties it can result in, before reaching a conclusion. Firstly, the most significant reason for this shift is a better quality of life in urban areas and a number of people in villages are below the poverty line. People in villages do not earn money equivalently for the work they do. For instance, despite of working for 7 to 8 hours a day even in scorching heat, a farmer earns less money when compared to a building worker or a daily labor in the cities. Besides this, lack of job opportunities, poor health care, electricity issues also contribute to this tendency. Furthermore, urban lifestyle attracts many people of villages. What are the negative effects of increasing urbanization? On one hand, overcrowding of cities is a critical problem due to this shift. In addition, a number of people can be seen struggling in cities when they do not find proper accommodation. This can also lead to increased traffic and pollution. On the other hand, as we already know that farmer is the backbone of our country, many food resources come from villages. While more and more people move to urban areas, we may not have enough farmers in the future and farming will lose its significance. To conclude, I believe that low quality of life, poor health care, lack of jobs in rural areas are the main reasons for urbanization. According to my view, this trend can cause overcrowding of cities and decreased food resources from villages in the future.
Urbanization
is defined
as increase in population of
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people
living in
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urban
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areas
. There is no denying that,
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people
in numerous countries are moving away from
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villages
to
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live
in
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urban
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areas
,
rapidly
rising the rates of urbanization. The following paragraphs will discuss the reasons for this shift
as well
as the difficulties it can result in,
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before
reaching a conclusion.

Firstly
, the most significant reason for this shift is a better quality of life in
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urban
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areas
and a number of
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people
in
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villages
are below the poverty line.
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People
in
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villages
do not earn money
equivalently
for the work they do.
For instance
,
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despite of
working for 7 to 8 hours a day even in scorching heat, a farmer earns less money when compared to a building worker or a daily labor in the
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cities
.
Besides
this, lack of job opportunities, poor health care, electricity issues
also
contribute to this tendency.
Furthermore
,
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urban
lifestyle attracts
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many
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people
of villages.

What are the
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negative
effects of increasing urbanization? On one hand, overcrowding of
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cities
is a critical problem due to this shift.
In addition
, a number of
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people
can be
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seen
struggling in
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cities
when they do not find proper accommodation. This can
also
lead to increased traffic and pollution.
On the other hand
, as we already know that farmer is the backbone of our country,
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many
food resources
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come
from
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villages
. While more and more
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people
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move
to
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urban
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areas
, we may not have
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enough
farmers in the future and farming will lose its significance.

To conclude
, I believe that low quality of life, poor health care, lack of jobs in rural
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areas
are the main reasons for urbanization. According to my view, this trend can cause overcrowding of
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cities
and decreased food resources from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
villages
in the future.

IELTS essay Task 2 writing, urbanization

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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