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Task 2 , writing , crimes

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People are divided in their opinion regarding punishments to criminals based on the magnitude of the crime. It is believed by many people that few prisoners should be punished by imposing them to do free community work rather than giving them a prison sentence. Let us examine both the views before reaching a concrete decision. Firstly, everyone who is a law breaker irrespective of the crime deserves to be punished in one or the other way. Although every criminal should be punished, not all of them deserve jail time. Besides this, punishment can be given in various forms based on the nature of offense. For instance, petty crimes like pick pocketing, trespassing, shoplifting, reckless driving do not require for the person to be in jail and recorded hours of community service is sufficient. What happens if every offender is put in prison? One of the most significant problems is overcrowding of prisons. Because of overcrowding, there is a fair chance of serious offenders to be released out of prison. Not only overcrowding but also petty criminals when put in jail can be influenced by convicts motivating them to do bigger crimes. However, when people get away with the crime by doing community service, there can be reduced scope for change, so along with this they must be charged with a fine. In conclusion, crimes like minor theft, trespassing and reckless driving do not require serious jail time and overcrowding of prisons should be considered as well. I completely agree with the idea, that unpaid community service should be a mode of punishment to certain prisoners.
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are divided
in their opinion regarding punishments to criminals based on the magnitude of the
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crime
. It
is believed
by
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many
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people
that few prisoners should
be punished
by imposing them to do free
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community
work
rather
than giving them a
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prison
sentence.
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Let
us examine both the views
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before
reaching a concrete decision.

Firstly
, everyone who is a law breaker irrespective of the
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crime
deserves to
be punished
in one or the other way. Although every criminal should
be punished
, not all of them deserve
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jail
time.
Besides
this, punishment can be
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given
in various forms based on the nature of offense.
For instance
, petty
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crimes
like pick pocketing, trespassing, shoplifting, reckless driving do not require for the person to be in
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jail
and recorded hours of
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community
service is sufficient.

What happens if every offender
is put
in
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prison
? One of the most significant problems is
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overcrowding
of
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prisons
.
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Because
of
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overcrowding
, there is a
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fair
chance of serious offenders to
be released
out of
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prison
. Not
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only
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overcrowding
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but
also
petty criminals when put in
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jail
can
be influenced
by convicts motivating them to do bigger
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crimes
.
However
, when
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people
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get
away with the
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crime
by doing
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community
service, there can be
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reduced
scope for
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change
,
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so
along with this they
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must
be charged
with a fine.

In conclusion
,
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crimes
like minor theft, trespassing and reckless driving do not require serious
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jail
time and
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overcrowding
of
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prisons
should
be considered
as well
. I completely
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agree
with the
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idea
, that unpaid
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community
service should be a mode of punishment to certain prisoners.

IELTS essay Task 2 , writing , crimes

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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