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Task 2: Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negativedevelopment? Give reasons for your answ v.2

Task 2: Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negativedevelopment? Give reasons for your answ v. 2
Modern technology has provided us with numerous mediums of communication. With the advent of computers and the internet, people rely greatly on technology. This has caused a transformation of relationships as well. This essay will discuss the positive and negative effects of this development. For instance, these days people are using smartphones not just for placing calls but also for video chats, photo sharing, and to play games online. They can instantly connect with their loved ones who are residing in different countries and it is not possible for them to meet more often. Moreover, with the help of social media, people are able to find their friends from schools and colleges. Also, they have the ability to create groups and events, where they can quickly reach out by using direct messaging and can update each other. Additionally, people who are introvert, they can find new friends by using platforms such as Facebook, Instagram, and Snapchat. Nevertheless, there are countless drawbacks as well. For example, people consider it easier to connect over video chat rather than putting efforts to meet their friends in person, which may create distance in relationships. Also, it is evident that people are adding more connections on social media, but they lack actual emotions and empathy. The relationships people are creating over the internet are more virtual than real, people are depriving themselves of actual connections which leads to stress and depression especially among the young generation. In addition to this, they tend to overshare information on the internet, which make them prone to identity and data theft, also the fraudulent activities have increased as people are putting their personal details over the internet. To recapitulate, from my point of view technology has certainly improved communication among friends and families. However, people must use the modes of communication which are more safe and secure.
Modern technology has provided us with numerous mediums of communication. With the advent of computers and the internet,
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people
rely
greatly
on technology. This has caused a transformation of relationships
as well
. This essay will discuss the
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positive
and
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negative
effects of this development.

For instance
, these days
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people
are using smartphones not
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just
for placing calls
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but
also
for video chats, photo sharing, and to play games online. They can
instantly
connect with their
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loved
ones who are residing in
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different
countries and it is not possible for them to
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meet
more
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often
.
Moreover
, with the
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help
of social media,
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people
are able to find their
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friends
from schools and colleges.
Also
, they have the ability to create groups and
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events
, where they can
quickly
reach out by using direct messaging and can update each other.
Additionally
,
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people
who are introvert, they can find new
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friends
by using platforms such as Facebook, Instagram, and Snapchat.

Nevertheless
, there are countless drawbacks
as well
.
For example
,
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people
consider it easier to connect over video chat
rather
than putting efforts to
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meet
their
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friends
in person, which may create distance in relationships.
Also
, it is evident that
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people
are adding more connections on social media,
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but
they lack actual emotions and empathy. The relationships
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people
are creating over the internet are more virtual than real,
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people
are depriving themselves of actual connections which leads to
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stress
and depression
especially
among the young generation.
In addition
to this, they tend to overshare information on the internet, which
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make
them prone to identity and data theft,
also
the fraudulent activities have increased as
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people
are putting their personal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
over the internet.

To recapitulate, from my point of view technology has
certainly
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improved
communication among
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friends
and families.
However
,
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people
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must
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use
the modes of communication which are more safe and secure.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Task 2: Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negativedevelopment? Give reasons for your answ v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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