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Task 2: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer. v.3

Task 2: People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer. v. 3
Our appearance is a very important part of our lives because it always determine what people think about us and how people treat us. Some people believe that clothes that we wear have an influence on our behavior; others disagree with this statement. In my opinion, I definitely agree that clothes influence people' s behavior for two important reasons. First, clothes influence the way people look at you and how they treat you; how people treat you affects your behavior. It' s hard to denial that people tend to treat well when you dress nice, on the other hand, if you wear strength clothes, people may look at you as if you are crazy. People tend to judge others only from their appearance. For example, one of my classmates when I was in university, she always wear outdated strength clothes and ornaments. I though she was crazy. Whenever we have to work together in a group of project, I tried to avoid having conversation with hear and work independently to finish quickly as possible. I did not try to communicate with her, so she became very serious and felt uncomfortable working with me. One day, we had to do another project together, it was a long project; so, I had to work with her everyday for two weeks. We started having conversation and after a while, I found out that I was wrong; she is actually a very nice person. I know that if I become more open to her, she would have felt comfortable talking to me sooner and we would have been a great team. This experience taught me that the way you dress really influence how people treat you, which effects how you behave to them. Second, people choose different clothes for different occasions to express their emotion and behavior. When you want to be active and have fun you wear clothes that support that behavior, and when you want to be serious and focused you wear different clothes. For instance, when I got ready for bicycling class at the gym this morning, I choose to wear cycling clothes, a bike-specific clothing made for a comfortable ride. I intentionally wear cycling clothing because I wanted to look and feel like as if I am a professional cycling athlete. The feeling of being a cycling athlete encourage me to keep pedaling my bike and get more exercise. When I saw my reflection in the mirror in the bicycling room at the gym, my clothes clearly indicated to me that it is time to get exercise for my health, be serious, enjoyed, and focused. As you can see, the clothes that you wear strongly impact your behavior. In summary, whether your clothing’s influence is intentional because you choose it for a specific occasion or its influence is unintentional because you react to how someone else treats you, what you wear has strong influence on how you behave. That’s why we should all choose clothing that we wear very carefully.
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believe that
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wear
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behavior
; others disagree with this statement. In my opinion, I definitely
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influence
the way
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people
look at you and how they
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treat
you; how
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people
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treat
you affects your
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behavior
.
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to denial that
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people
tend to
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treat
well when you dress nice,
on the other hand
, if you
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wear
strength
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clothes
,
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people
may look at you as if you are crazy.
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tend to judge others
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only
from their appearance.
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, one of my classmates when I was in university, she always
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wear
outdated strength
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clothes
and ornaments. I
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though
she was crazy. Whenever we
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have to
work together in a group of project, I tried to avoid having conversation with hear and work
independently
to finish
quickly
as possible. I did not try to communicate with her,
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so
she became
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very
serious and felt uncomfortable working with me. One day, we had to do another project together, it was a long project;
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so
, I had to work with her
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everyday
for two weeks. We
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started
having conversation and after a while, I found out that I was
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wrong
; she is actually a
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very
nice person. I know that if I become more open to her, she would have felt comfortable talking to me
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sooner and
we would have been a great team. This experience taught me that the way you dress
really
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influence
how
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people
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treat
you, which effects how you behave to them.

Second,
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people
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choose
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different
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clothes
for
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occasions to express their emotion and
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behavior
. When you want to be active and have fun you
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wear
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clothes
that support that
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behavior
, and when you want to be serious and focused you
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wear
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different
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.
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ready for bicycling
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class
at the gym this morning, I
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choose
to
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wear
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cycling
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clothes
, a bike-specific clothing made for a comfortable ride. I
intentionally
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wear
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cycling
clothing
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because
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cycling
athlete. The feeling of being a
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cycling
athlete encourage me to
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keep
pedaling my bike and
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get
more exercise. When I
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saw
my reflection in the mirror in the bicycling room at the gym, my
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clothes
clearly
indicated to me that it is time to
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get
exercise for my health, be serious, enjoyed, and focused. As you can
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see
, the
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clothes
that you
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wear
strongly
impact your behavior.

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your
clothing’s
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influence
is intentional
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because
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choose
it for a specific occasion or its
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influence
is unintentional
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because
you react to how someone else
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treats
you, what you
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wear
has strong
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influence
on how you behave. That’s why we should all
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choose
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wear
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carefully
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58Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Task 2: People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
500 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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