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task 1governments should introduce laws to protect animal species

task 1governments should introduce laws to protect animal species L3lbV

It is true that human-being are devastating the natural habitats of wildlife. There are several reasons why this is the case. I believe that governments should introduce laws to protect animal species On the one hand, there are various reasons why animal habitats have been threatened on land and in sea by human activities. Firstly, enormous areas of rainforest have been cut down in recent years which destroy animal habitats. As a result, some animal species can not find another home to live in, while others face difficulties adapting to a new environment. This would put these animals at a higher risk of extinction. Secondly, toxic waste from factories and businesses is being dumped directly into nearby the sea and does great harm to the marine species. For instance, Formosa company which is located in HaTinh province, VietNam discharged waste into the sea. This did exert a great deal of influence on sea life and local economies. Moreover, human activities, including intense fishing and overexploitation are causing damage to the marine ecosystem such as sperm whale, king crab. In my view, stricter punishments should be imposed for illegal logging, deforestation, overfishing and overexploitation. It is important to provide financial support to organizations that are working to save endangered species such as Panda in China. In addition, the politicians have to require manufacturers to install proper waste treatment systems. The authorities should raise people’s environmental awareness. In conclusion, both national governments and individuals must play the part in looking after the wildlife habitats because animals play an essential role the balance of the ecosystem.

It is true that human-being are devastating the natural habitats of wildlife. There are several reasons why this is the case. I believe that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritiespublic authorities
governments
 should introduce laws to protect You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnaturalbodily
animal
 species

On the one hand, there are various reasons why You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnaturalbodily
animal
 habitats have been threatened
 on land and in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsurfpondexpanselakeocean
sea
 by human activities. Firstly
, enormous areas of rainforest have been This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimize
cut
 down in recent years which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demolishruin
destroy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnaturalbodily
animal
 habitats. As a result
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnaturalbodily
animal
 species can not find another home to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 in, while others face difficulties adapting to a new environment. This would put these You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 at a higher This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :hazarddanger
risk
 of extinction. Secondly
, toxic waste from factories and businesses is being dumped
directly
 into nearby the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsurfpondexpanselakeocean
sea
 and does great harm to the marine species. For instance
, Formosa This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 which is located
 in Possible spelling mistake found.Hating
HaTinh
 province, Possible spelling mistake found.Vietnam
VietNam
 discharged waste into the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsurfpondexpanselakeocean
sea
. This did exert a great deal of influence on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsurfpondexpanselakeocean
sea
 life and local economies. Moreover
, human activities, including intense fishing and overexploitation are causing damage to the marine ecosystem such as sperm whale, king crab.

In my view, stricter punishments should be imposed
 for illegal logging, deforestation, overfishing and overexploitation. It is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 to provide financial support to organizations that are working to save endangered species such as Panda in China. In addition
, the politicians This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 require manufacturers to install proper waste treatment systems. The authorities should raise This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
’s environmental awareness.

In conclusion
, both national This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritiespublic authorities
governments
 and individuals This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 play the part in looking after the wildlife habitats This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 play an essential role the balance of the ecosystem. 