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Celebrities such as film stars and sportspersons support several charitable organizations. Some people argue that they are doing this to gain more publicity. I don’t quite agree with this view. Celebrities are certainly interested in hogging the limelight and that may be the reason they get involved in charitable work. Even so, by openly supporting various humanitarian causes, they are also creating awareness and encouraging other people to get involved. In my opinion, the argument that celebrities reduce the importance of problems does not hold water. They bring issues to public attention by lending their support to them. For example, countless celebrities endorse Green Peace and PETA. By doing so, they have created awareness about the need to protect the planet and wildlife. I doubt that PETA would have gained so much attention without the active support of celebrities. Of course, celebrities do not do much other than just lending their support. But because of their popularity, the media follow them wherever they go and when they get involved in a cause, that makes headlines. This encourages the fans of these celebrities to also support those causes. This is how celebrities make a difference to the world. Because of their huge fan following they can encourage people to act by simply voicing their support for an organization or a cause. It does not really matter whether they are doing this for their own benefits or for the benefit of the charity.
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Celebrities
such as film stars and
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sportspersons
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support
several charitable organizations.
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people
argue that they are doing this to gain more publicity. I don’t quite
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agree
with this view.
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Celebrities
are
certainly
interested in hogging the limelight and that may be the reason they
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get
involved in charitable work. Even
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, by
openly
supporting various humanitarian
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causes
, they are
also
creating awareness and encouraging other
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people
to
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get
involved.

In my opinion, the argument that
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celebrities
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reduce
the importance of problems does not hold water. They bring issues to public attention by lending their
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support
to them.
For example
, countless
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celebrities
endorse Green Peace and PETA. By doing
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so
, they have created awareness about the need to protect the planet and wildlife. I doubt that PETA would have gained
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so
much attention without the active
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support
of celebrities.

Of course
,
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celebrities
do not do much other than
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just
lending their
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support
.
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because
of their popularity, the media follow them wherever they go and when they
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get
involved in a
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cause
, that
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makes
headlines. This encourages the fans of these
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celebrities
to
also
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support
those
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causes
. This is how
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celebrities
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make
a difference to the world.
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Because
of their huge fan following they can encourage
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people
to act by
simply
voicing their
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support
for an organization or a
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cause
. It does not
really
matter whether they are doing this for their
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own
benefits or for the benefit of the charity.
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IELTS essay Celebrities found raising

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
241 words
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