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In the modern age, advanced technology has made us able to record and monitor people, even when they are unaware.

In the modern age, advanced technology has made us able to record and monitor people, even when they are unaware. L3Ox3
In the modern age, advanced technology has made us able to record and monitor people, even when they are unaware. Though it has it’s own disadvantages but I certainly agree that it is highly essential and the benefits can not be ignored. In this essay, I will provide some supporting arguments for the same. Undoubtedly, getting monitored unconsciously, has several disadvantages. Such as at cameras at dressing rooms, Hotel rooms or Fitting rooms in Malls could create dangerous privacy issues. For instance, easily those recordings can be transferred to internet for marketing purposes, or can be used to blackmail customers, which is a threat to general public. Although at most of the private places, it is not allowed to use hidden cameras, it’s difficult to make public follow those laws. In Contrary to that being in a globally connected world, we can not ignore, advantages of security camera and cell phone trackers usage. First of all, keeping an eye on the population and crowd at any place, to track any kind thief, the best possible way is using a security camera. Secondly, because of such advanced tracking systems, are helping the Police and Security Force to take right steps at right times to
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, getting monitored
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, has several disadvantages. Such as at
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cameras
at dressing rooms, Hotel rooms or Fitting rooms in Malls could create
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dangerous
privacy issues.
For instance
,
easily
those recordings can
be transferred
to internet for marketing purposes, or can be
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used
to blackmail customers, which is a threat to
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general public
. Although at most of the private places, it is not
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allowed
to
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use
hidden
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cameras
, it’s difficult to
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make
public follow those laws. In Contrary to that being in a globally connected world, we can not
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ignore
, advantages of security
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camera
and cell phone trackers usage.

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First of all
, keeping an eye on the population and crowd at any place, to
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track
any kind thief, the best possible way is using a security
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camera
.
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,
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because
of such advanced tracking systems, are helping the Police and Security Force to take right steps at right times to
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IELTS essay In the modern age, advanced technology has made us able to record and monitor people, even when they are unaware.

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3 paragraphs
202 words
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