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talk about immigrants affect for the cities

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As a matter of fact, we all agree that migration is one of the most important issues. So, we can shed more light on migration. In my opinion I would like to say that migrants are changing life in the cities. Sometimes they change it for the better and sometimes they change it for the worse. For example, Dubai immigrants change it for the better. It has become an international city and loved by tourists. Also, there are some cities migrants change it for the worse. For example, Islamic counties that have been changed by immigrants for the worse as immigrants have affected Islam in them and are doing their jobs without resorting to law and Islam.
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it for the better. It has become an international city and
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cities migrants
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by immigrants for the worse as immigrants have
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Islam in them and are doing their jobs without resorting to law and Islam.

IELTS essay talk about immigrants affect for the cities

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
117 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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