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Talk about an occasion you have attended an event that you had a specific role in. Please say– When and where did the event occur? – What was your role there? – What was the hard part in it? v.1

Talk about an occasion you have attended an event that you had a specific role in. Please say– When and where did the event occur? – What was your role there? – What was the hard part in it? v. 1
It is undeniable that usage of conventional energy like coal, oil and natural gases has become a norm across the world. On the other hand, some countries are trying to adopt alternative sources of energy which in my opinion is a positive development since it is pollution-free and cheap. One of the main reasons why I think the utilisation of renewable energy is a positive trend is Eco friendly. This is because solar and wind energy is produced with the help of sun and wind and these do not emit hazardous pollutants into the air, which causes global warming, unlike fossil fuels. To illustrate, most European countries like Finland and Denmark are on the top list of pollution-free countries due to gradually shift from fossil fuels to alternative sources of energy. For example, a recent study by the BBC news revealed that these countries generate 80% of their energy from the wind turbine and solar panel farm. Apart from them, they have a successful campaign for using cars on batteries and cycles for commuting, which do not contribute to any pollution. Profoundly cheap installation is another positive impact of adopting alternative sources. To elucidate, for the extraction of fossil fuels needs huge manpower, big machinery and expensive tools for drilling, whereas, green energy requires a low amount for the installation of wind turbine and solar panel. Take Bangladesh, as an example, where the government of Bangladesh has installed solar and wind turbine in certain parts of its cities despite having low funds, resulting in the fastest growing economy in the world. In conclusion, although it is true that utilisation of fossil fuels is expeditiously accelerating, I think the alternative source of energy like solar and wind should be encouraged because they are cheap and Eco friendly and do not cripple the environment.
It is undeniable that usage of conventional
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energy
like coal, oil and natural gases has become a norm across the world.
On the other hand
,
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some
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countries
are trying to adopt
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alternative
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sources
of
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energy
which in my opinion is a
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positive
development since it is pollution-free and
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cheap
.

One of the main reasons why I
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think
the
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utilisation
of renewable
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energy
is a
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positive
trend is Eco friendly. This is
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because
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solar
and
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wind
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energy
is produced
with the
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help
of sun and
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wind
and these do not emit hazardous pollutants into the air, which causes global warming, unlike
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fossil
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fuels
. To illustrate, most European
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countries
like Finland and Denmark are on the top list of pollution-free
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countries
due to
gradually
shift from
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fossil
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fuels
to
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alternative
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sources
of
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energy
.
For example
, a recent study by the BBC news revealed that these
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countries
generate 80% of their
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energy
from the
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wind
turbine and
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solar
panel farm. Apart from them, they have a successful campaign for using cars on batteries and cycles for commuting, which do not contribute to any pollution.

Profoundly
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cheap
installation is another
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positive
impact of adopting
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alternative
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sources
. To elucidate, for the extraction of
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fossil
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fuels
needs huge manpower,
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big
machinery and expensive tools for drilling, whereas, green
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energy
requires a low amount for the installation of
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wind
turbine and
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solar
panel. Take Bangladesh, as an example, where the
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government
of Bangladesh has installed
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solar
and
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wind
turbine in certain parts of its cities despite having low funds, resulting in the fastest growing economy in the world.

In conclusion
, although it is true that
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utilisation
of
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fossil
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fuels
is
expeditiously
accelerating, I
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think
the
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alternative
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source
of
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energy
like
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solar
and
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wind
should
be encouraged
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because
they are
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cheap
and Eco friendly and do not cripple the environment.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Talk about an occasion you have attended an event that you had a specific role in. Please say– When and where did the event occur? – What was your role there? – What was the hard part in it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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