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Talk about a time when you gave advice to someone

Here I would like to talk about a time when I gave advice to my sister. 3 years ago when her graduation had completed my parents want my sister to get married soon because my maternal and brought a in an influential and wonderful marriage proposal for her but she had not ready for it and she also said to me that she had a different Future Plans because she had to go abroad for their higher education and she came to me and sad please convince her parents to say no that proposal I give advice to her that you should go to parents and talk to them calmly and tell everything because my parents must comprehend you after that she went and told everything to my parents my but my parents are really disappointing with her and don't like her decision but I took entire side of my sister and she is started crying in front of them but my mother's heart was sinking and she said they will think about it after that I told to my parents that nowadays education is really important and and she is is her life we cant control on her dreams finally my parents say no to that proposal I felt really elated because my sister now is in abroad and thriving in her life

Here I would like to talk about a time when I gave advice to my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelativetwin
sister
. 3 years ago when her graduation had completed my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 want my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelativetwin
sister
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 married This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 my maternal and brought Use “an” instead of ‘a’ if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. ‘an article’, ‘an hour’.an
a
 in an influential and wonderful marriage proposal for her This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 she had not ready for Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).it, and
it and
 she also
 said to me that she had a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 Future Plans This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 she had to go abroad for their higher Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).education, and
education and
 she came to me and sad This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 convince her You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 to say no that proposal I give advice to her that you should go to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 and talk to them calmly
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :inform
tell
 everything This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 comprehend you after that she went and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :informed
told
 everything to my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
Use a comma before ‘but’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).my,
my
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 are really
 disappointing with her and don't like her decision This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I took entire side of my Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).sister, and
sister and
 she is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 crying in front of them This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 my mother's heart was Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).sinking, and
sinking and
 she said they will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 about it after that I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :informed
told
 to my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 that nowadays education is really
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
Possible typo: you repeated a wordand
and and
 she Possible typo: you repeated a wordis
is is
 her life we Did you mean “can’t” or “cannot”?can'tcannot
cant
 control on her dreams finally
 my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 say no to that proposal I felt really
 elated This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelativetwin
sister
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 is in abroad and thriving in her life