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Talk about a goal that you have set and achieved. What was the goal? How did you accomplish it? Include specific reasons and details to explain your choices. v.1

Talk about a goal that you have set and achieved. What was the goal? How did you accomplish it? Include specific reasons and details to explain your choices. v. 1
Despite the environmental benefits of cycling, few people are riding a bicycle for transportation. This essay will examine the main causes for the uncommon use of bicycles and propose possible solutions to this problem. There are several reasons why cycling is not considered a viable means of transportation in numerous places. First of all, using a bike to travel around is time-consuming because the speed of bicycles cannot compare with that of motorcycles and automobiles. For example, if a cyclist hopes to get to work on time in such a congested city like Hanoi, he is likely to lose a considerable amount of time for commuting which can otherwise be spent more productively. Secondly, a large number of road users do not opt for bicycles due to health-related reasons. This is because riding a bicycle requires certain physical exertion that may be too strenuous for some people, especially during severe weather conditions, making them reluctant to cycle on a regular basis. However, feasible measures can be taken to encourage more transport by bicycle. Firstly, bicycle contests with valuable prizes should be conducted annually along with propaganda and campaigns about the positive impacts of bike travelling on the environment, which may raise awareness and help make biking a habit among citizens. Furthermore, the Government should allocate more spending to cycling infrastructure investment. By developing an elaborate network of cycle paths and lanes as well as resting areas for cyclists, riding a bicycle will become significantly more comfortable and convenient, which will gradually result in more journeys being made by bicycle. For instance, Amsterdam succeeds in becoming the bicycle capital of the world thanks to government’s efforts in facilitating cycling through road design. To conclude, while cycling has not gained popularity due to several reasons, appropriate solutions can be implemented to promote the use of this environmentally friendly vehicle.
Despite the environmental benefits of
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cycling
, few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are riding a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycle
for transportation. This essay will examine the main causes for the uncommon
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
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bicycles
and propose possible solutions to this problem.

There are several reasons why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycling
is not considered a viable means of transportation in numerous places.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, using a bike to travel around is time-consuming
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the speed of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycles
cannot compare with that of motorcycles and automobiles.
For example
, if a cyclist hopes to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to work on time in such a congested city like Hanoi, he is likely to lose a considerable amount of time for commuting which can
otherwise
be spent
more
productively
.
Secondly
,
Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use "many" or "numerous"
a large number of
road users do not opt for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycles
due to health-related reasons. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
riding a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycle
requires certain physical exertion that may be too strenuous for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
especially
during severe weather conditions, making them reluctant to cycle on a regular basis.

However
, feasible measures can
be taken
to encourage more transport by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycle
.
Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycle
contests with valuable prizes should
be conducted
annually
along with propaganda and campaigns about the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
impacts of bike travelling on the environment, which may raise awareness and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
biking a habit among citizens.
Furthermore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should allocate more spending to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycling
infrastructure investment. By developing an elaborate network of cycle paths and lanes
as well
as resting areas for cyclists, riding a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycle
will become
significantly
more comfortable and convenient, which will
gradually
result in more journeys
being made
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycle
.
For instance
, Amsterdam succeeds in becoming the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycle
capital of the world thanks to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
’s efforts in facilitating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycling
through road design.

To conclude
, while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycling
has not gained popularity due to several reasons, appropriate solutions can
be implemented
to promote the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of this
environmentally
friendly vehicle.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Talk about a goal that you have set and achieved. What was the goal? How did you accomplish it? Include specific reasons and details to explain your choices. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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