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Talk about a friend who played a big part in your life

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Somewhere I heard or read that walking with a friend in the dark is better than walking alone in the light. And, I must say that I fully agree with the statement. Indeed, friends are important because they always somehow affect us. Today, I would like to talk about one such friend who has played an important part in my life. His name was Fazle Rabbi, and he was my university friend. I met him for the first time at our university cafeteria about 7 years ago when we both were waiting on a line to pay for our coffee. He asked me if I was coming from a certain part of my county as I was talking in a different dialect, and I said that he was right in his assumption. After that casual conversation, our friendship had started, and we are continuing our friendship still to this date Anyway, both I and Fazle were in the same year of our university, but Fazle was studying a different subject. After we started our friendship, Fazle had helped me with a number of things, which included collecting class notes for me from his friends and taking me to the hospital when I was sick. Sometimes, he even offered me to use his bicycle to reach the university library on a cold evening. Even though we were just friends, we treated each other like a brother. By the way, I had a bad habit of smoking, and it was Fazle who finally convinced me to quit smoking. Fazle even took a very innovative approach to force me to follow a particular study routine, which ultimately had helped me to get a very good final grade, when leaving university. Anyway, Fazle has influenced my life in a tremendous manner, but I think that he played his most important role as a friend when he encouraged me to choose teaching as a profession instead of becoming a public health professional. In fact, it is because of my friend Fazle that I have such a fulfilling career today.
Somewhere I heard or read that walking with a
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friend
in the dark is better than walking alone in the light. And, I
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must
say that I
fully
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agree
with the statement.
Indeed
,
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friends
are
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important
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because
they always somehow affect us.
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Today
, I would like to talk about one such
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friend
who has played an
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important
part in my life.

His name was
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Fazle
Rabbi, and he was my
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university
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friend
. I met him for the
first
time at our
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university
cafeteria about 7 years ago when we both were waiting on a line to pay for our coffee.

He asked me if I was coming from a certain part of my county as I was talking in a
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different
dialect, and I said that he was right in his assumption. After that casual conversation, our friendship had
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started
, and we are continuing our friendship
still
to this date Anyway, both I and
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Fazle
were in the same year of our
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university
,
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but
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Fazle
was studying a
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different
subject.

After we
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started
our friendship,
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Fazle
had
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helped
me with a number of things, which included collecting
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class
notes for me from his
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friends
and taking me to the hospital when I was sick.
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Sometimes
, he even offered me to
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use
his bicycle to reach the
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university
library on a
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cold
evening.
Even though
we were
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just
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friends
, we treated each other like a brother. By the way, I had a
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bad
habit of smoking, and it was
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Fazle
who
finally
convinced me to quit smoking.
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even took a
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very
innovative approach to force me to follow a particular study routine, which
ultimately
had
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helped
me to
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get
a
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good
final grade, when leaving university.

Anyway,
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Fazle
has influenced my life
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,
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I
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think
that he played his most
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important
role as a
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friend
when he encouraged me to choose
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teaching
as a profession
instead
of becoming a public health professional. In fact, it is
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because
of my
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friend
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Fazle
that I have such a fulfilling career
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today
.
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IELTS essay Talk about a friend who played a big part in your life

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
344 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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