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Talk about a book that you have not read, but you are interested in reading it. Why do you want to read it. Give reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Talk about a book that you have not read, but you are interested in reading it. Why do you want to read it. Give reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Nowadays, the school system is overly focused on grading. Some people argued that the colleges need to receive only students who had excellent transcript in high school, while others think they should give the opportunity for everyone. I do share the same view with the second group. On the one hand, the transcript-based recruitment will introduce the problems of grade inflation and incorrect assessment. For example, when the grades of lower-calibre students get inflated, it makes them appear similar to higher-calibre students. The problem is exacerbated by the tendency for different academic departments to exhibit different rates of grade inflation and the grades are no longer a good method of ranking performance to select qualified persons. On the other hand, standardized tests are the only thing that allows college admission professionals to control for wildly different average GPAs at different high schools. For example, if a student had a tough time in high school and ended up with a less-than-stellar transcript, a high test score could help to bolster that student’s application. But it is important to recognize that the reverse can happen, too. Students who perform well in the classroom might struggle with standardized testing. A student’s ability to learn and to process information over time is a better indicator of how they’ll fare in college, rather than something more fleeting, such as their standardized test-taking skills. Overall, the grading would increase the pressure on teachers to inflate their grades resulting to the unfair enrolment, meanwhile the standardized tests would be able to show an applicant’s aptitude for success in college. Although in some occasions, standardized tests only seem to underscore individual weaknesses of learners and promote an unhealthy culture of one-upping each other, it is still an effective way to assess the knowledge capability of people.
Nowadays, the
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system is
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focused on grading.
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people
argued that the colleges need to receive
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only
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students
who had excellent transcript in
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high
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school
, while others
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think
they should give the opportunity for everyone. I do share the same view with the second group.

On the one hand, the transcript-based recruitment will introduce the problems of
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grade
inflation and incorrect assessment.
For example
, when the
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grades
of
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lower-calibre
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students
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get
inflated, it
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makes
them appear similar to
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higher-calibre
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students
. The problem
is exacerbated
by the tendency for
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different
academic departments to exhibit
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different
rates of
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grade
inflation and the
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grades
are no longer a
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good
method of ranking performance to select qualified persons.

On the other hand
,
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standardized
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tests
are the
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only
thing that
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allows
college admission professionals to control for
wildly
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different
average
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GPAs at
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different
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high
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schools
.
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, if a
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student
had a tough time in
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high
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school
and ended up with a
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less-than-stellar
transcript, a
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high
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test
score could
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help
to bolster that
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student’s
application.
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But
it is
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important
to recognize that the reverse can happen, too.
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Students
who perform well in the classroom might struggle with
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standardized
testing. A
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student’s
ability to learn and to process information over time is a better indicator of how they’ll fare in college,
rather
than something more fleeting, such as their
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standardized
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test
-taking
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skills
.

Overall
, the grading would increase the pressure on teachers to inflate their
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grades
resulting to the unfair
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enrolment
, meanwhile the
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standardized
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tests
would be able to
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show
an applicant’s aptitude for success in college. Although in
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some
occasions,
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standardized
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tests
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only
seem to underscore individual weaknesses of learners and promote an unhealthy culture of one-upping each other, it is
still
an effective way to assess the knowledge capability of
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people
.
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IELTS essay Talk about a book that you have not read, but you are interested in reading it. Why do you want to read it. Give reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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