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T P O-06 - Integrated Writing Task Communal online encyclopedias represent one of the latest resources to be found on the Internet. They are in many respects like traditional printed encyclopedias collections of articles on various subjects. What is speci v.1

T P O-06 - Integrated Writing Task Communal online encyclopedias represent one of the latest resources to be found on the Internet. They are in many respects like traditional printed encyclopedias collections of articles on various subjects. What is speci v. 1
The rationale behind making movies should be just for recreational purpose, which is a thinking of a large number of people, while another group says that the motive of cinema should not be limited to fun only, but it must have moral values also. This essay will contemplate into both of the views that why and why not the weigh should be given to the teachings in any story. I opine that my inclination towards need of getting learnings from the pictures. First of all, thinking towards the fun factor, in today's competitive edge and stressful life, everyone wants some entertainment. To illustrate this, after a long time work, I wanted to enthral myself seeing a comedy movie so that I can bring some laugh to forget the stress. However, nowadays people understand their liability, it is for the purpose that for some time, they want to forget bad and good, and just want to enjoy the virtual life. Therefore, having the education pattern in the fun-time seems a bit unfair. On the other hand, cinema is a source where one can capture a large group of people, especially youth. To give a clear example, recently released picture name "Kesari" has just given a beatific lesson to the young people towards the motherland, which people appreciated and taken it in a positive way. Consequently, to spread the message on social issues and how to compete with it; films can be a significant platform. This way, people enjoy the story and learn also by absorbing the gist. To finalise, although it is irrefutable that people go to cinemas for entertainment, it is also true that it is the need of the hour to provide some of the educational messages to the viewers. Thus, it is imperative to add good teachings to make the people aware about the various issues and its possible solutions.
The rationale behind making movies should be
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just
for recreational purpose, which is a thinking of
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a large number of
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people
, while another group says that the motive of cinema should not
be limited
to fun
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only
,
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but
it
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must
have moral values
also
. This essay will contemplate into both of the views that why and why not the weigh should be
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given
to the teachings in any story. I opine that my inclination towards need of getting learnings from the pictures.

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First of all
, thinking towards the fun factor, in
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today
's competitive edge and stressful life, everyone wants
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some
entertainment. To illustrate this, after a long time work, I wanted to
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enthral
myself seeing a comedy movie
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so
that I can bring
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some
laugh to forget the
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stress
.
However
, nowadays
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people
understand their liability, it is for the purpose that for
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some
time, they want to forget
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bad
and
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good
, and
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just
want to enjoy the virtual life.
Therefore
, having the education pattern in the fun-time seems a bit unfair.

On the other hand
, cinema is a source where one can capture a large group of
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people
,
especially
youth. To give a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
example, recently released picture name
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"
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Kesari
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"
has
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just
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given
a beatific lesson to the young
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people
towards the motherland, which
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people
appreciated and taken it in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
way.
Consequently
, to spread the message on social issues and how to compete with it; films can be a significant platform. This way,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
enjoy the story and learn
also
by absorbing the gist.

To
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finalise
, although it is irrefutable that
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people
go to cinemas for entertainment, it is
also
true that it is the need of the hour to provide
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
educational messages to the viewers.

Thus
, it is imperative to
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add
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good
teachings to
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make
the
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people
aware about the various issues and its possible solutions.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay T P O-06 - Integrated Writing Task Communal online encyclopedias represent one of the latest resources to be found on the Internet. They are in many respects like traditional printed encyclopedias collections of articles on various subjects. What is speci v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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