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Summarize the points made in the lecture with the way they oppose to what is given in the passage as well.

Summarize the points made in the lecture with the way they oppose to what is given in the passage as well. 0ABbG
According to the Reading passage, Altruism is a type of behaviour in which animals perform selfless acts for another animal or group of animals. This selfless behaviour is seen both in animals as well as humans. The passage also talks about an example of meerkats which is a mammal habituating the grasslands of Africa to understand what are the traits shown by altruistic animals. In the example cited, the meerkats keep a safe guard while other in the group look for food and in this course if there is any danger from the incoming predator to the group of meerkats, the safe guard gives a warning alarm. This signal allows the predator to notice the safe guard and the group can disperse quickly or can stay in group to fend off the predator. The passage details that by standing guard there is no advantage obtained because the guard cannot eat food and therefore remains hungry. Moreover, the attention of the predator towards the guard increases the chances of becoming a prey. However, these details of the example have been challenged in the lecture with the recent study done on these meerkats of Africa. The studies suggest that the group of meerkats eats some food before going for hunting and the guard been given a larger part because of which the guard is not hungry. The second detail as suggested in passage was challenged on the grounds that the guard stands near the burrows such that if any predator is in sight, the guard alarms everyone with an alarm and quickly goes into the burrows protecting it from falling prey to the predator. On the other hand, the group of meerkats show movements of either dispersing or gathering thus gets noticed by the predator and have more chances of falling prey than the guard. These qualities of the guard are very complex in order to mark the traits that are to be considered as altruistic or not. The lecture also notes that what type of actions can be called altruistic such as a person donating a kidney to a relative or may be a complete stranger will never receive credit for this action from the person or from the society per say.
According to the Reading
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passage
, Altruism is a type of
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behaviour
in which
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animals
perform selfless acts for another
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animal
or
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group
of
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animals
. This selfless
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behaviour
is
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seen
both in
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animals
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as well as
humans.

The
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passage
also
talks about an example of
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meerkats
which is a mammal habituating the grasslands of Africa to understand what are the traits shown by altruistic animals.

In the example cited, the
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meerkats
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keep
a safe
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guard
while other in the
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group
look for food and in this course if there is any
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danger
from the incoming predator to the
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group
of
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meerkats
, the safe
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guard
gives a warning alarm. This signal
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allows
the predator to notice the safe
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guard
and the
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group
can disperse
quickly
or can stay in
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group
to fend off the predator.

The
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passage
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details
that by standing
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guard
there is no advantage obtained
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because
the
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guard
cannot eat food and
therefore
remains hungry.
Moreover
, the attention of the predator towards the
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guard
increases the chances of becoming a prey.
However
, these
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details
of the example have
been challenged
in the lecture with the recent study done on these
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meerkats
of Africa. The studies suggest that the
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group
of
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meerkats
eats
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some
food
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before
going for hunting and the
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guard
been
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given
a larger part
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because
of which the
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guard
is not hungry. The second detail as suggested in
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passage
was challenged
on the grounds that the
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guard
stands near the burrows such that if any predator is in sight, the
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guard
alarms everyone with an alarm and
quickly
goes into the burrows protecting it from falling prey to the predator.

On the other hand
, the
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group
of
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meerkats
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show
movements of either dispersing or gathering
thus
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gets
noticed by the predator and have more chances of falling prey than the guard.

These qualities of the
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guard
are
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very
complex in order to mark the traits that are to
be considered
as altruistic or not. The lecture
also
notes that what type of actions can
be called
altruistic such as a person donating a kidney to a relative or may be a complete stranger will never receive credit for this action from the person or from the society
Did you mean "per se" (=by itself, by themselves)?
per say
.
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IELTS essay Summarize the points made in the lecture with the way they oppose to what is given in the passage as well.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
371 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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