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the government in Littleville plans to build a large mall in a newly constructed zone outside the city. Littleville hopes to attract many wealthy clients who it believes will shop at the Littleville mall's many planned boutique store. Ten years ago B

the government in Littleville plans to build a large mall in a newly constructed zone outside the city. Littleville hopes to attract many wealthy clients who it believes will shop at the Littleville mall's many planned boutique store. Ten years ago B NrWJg
The argument claims that the plan of building a large mall in the newly constructed outside city area will attract wealthy clients of Littleville. In support of the claim, the author also stated that such a plan that was executed ten years ago, in the same province, was successful in attracting the clients and was successful in no time. To evaluate this recommendation, we need to know the answers of three questions. First of all, is the scenario of ten years old Bigsburg and today's Littleville the same? Or in other words, is it still valid that people still want to go to big shopping malls to buy luxury things the same way they did ten years ago? The situations might be completely different now. People might want to save time nowadays and prefer online shopping more than going to shopping malls. If these assumptions are any true, these would undermine the author's recommendation. Secondly, are the residents of Littleville eager to the newly constructed zone outside the city to shop wealthy stuff? This is a big question that needs to be evaluated before executing such big plans. Perhaps the people in Littleville feel more easy to stay inside the city area for shopping. Perhaps Littleville is a very big city compounding a large area that takes a good amount of time to travel all the way outside the city to reach the newly constructed area. Perhaps the transportation system in Littleville is still not that advanced and its hard for people to find a transport to go outside the city. There should be a survey executed with the residents of Littleville taking this problems in account. If any of these is true, Littleville's new project of constructing the mall might be in question. Finally, perhaps the most important one, haven't been any high class and well categorized mall built in Littleville's downtown area in these past ten years? Is there no other alternative malls that the residents can choose within the city boundary? It can be easier for them to shop from any high class malls within the city boundary. If there are other big malls, why would the people of Littleville go outside their city? In conclusion of the argument, as it stands now, is flawed. More evidences should be provided to evaluate this flawed argument. The questions should be answered and more surveys should be conducted to find out the answers.
The argument claims that the plan of building a large
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mall
in the
newly
constructed
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outside
city
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area
will attract

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wealthy
clients of
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Littleville
. In support of the claim, the author
also
stated that such a plan that
was executed
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ten


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years
ago, in the same province, was successful in attracting the clients and was successful in no time. To evaluate
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this


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recommendation
, we need to know the answers of three questions.

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, is the scenario of ten years
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Bigsburg
and
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today
's
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Littleville
the same? Or
in other words
, is it
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still


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valid
that
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people
still
want to go to
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big
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shopping
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malls
to
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buy
luxury things the same way they did ten years ago? The

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situations
might be completely
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different
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now
.
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People
might want to save time nowadays and prefer online
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shopping
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more


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than
going to
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shopping
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malls
. If these assumptions are any true, these would undermine the author's recommendation.

Secondly
, are the residents of
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Littleville
eager to the
newly
constructed zone
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outside
the city to shop wealthy stuff?

This is a
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big
question that needs to
be evaluated
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before
executing such
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big
plans. Perhaps the
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people
in
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Littleville
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feel


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more
easy to stay inside the city
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area
for
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shopping
. Perhaps
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Littleville
is a
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very
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big
city compounding a large
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area
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that


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takes
a
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good
amount of time to travel all the way
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outside
the city to reach the
newly
constructed
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area
. Perhaps
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the


transportation system in
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Littleville
is
still
not that advanced and its
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hard
for
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people
to find
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a transport
to go

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outside
the city. There should be a survey executed with the residents of
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Littleville
taking
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this
problems in account. If any of these is true,
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Littleville
's new project of constructing the
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mall
might be in question.

Finally
, perhaps the most
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important
one, haven't been any high
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class
and well categorized
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mall
built in
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Littleville
's

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downtown
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area
in these past ten years? Is there no other alternative
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malls
that the residents can choose within the
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city


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boundary
? It can be easier for them to shop from any high
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class
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malls
within the city boundary. If there are other
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big
malls,

why would the
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people
of
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Littleville
go
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outside
their city?

In conclusion
of the argument, as it stands
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now
,
is flawed
. More evidences should
be provided
to evaluate this
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flawed


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argument
. The questions should
be answered
and more surveys should
be conducted
to find out the answers.
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IELTS essay the government in Littleville plans to build a large mall in a newly constructed zone outside the city. Littleville hopes to attract many wealthy clients who it believes will shop at the Littleville mall's many planned boutique store. Ten years ago B

Essay
  American English
20 paragraphs
404 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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