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Sugar Consumption and its health issues

Sugar Consumption and its health issues XVk1A
Although sugar is an important reason for a lot of health issues, it is one of the top commodities that being traded in our world which makes it hard to formulate regulations to reduce its consumption, so who should be taking the lead to solve these health issues and what are the solutions that we can come up with to help eliminate these issues? History has shown that governments and health organizations have worked to regulate its consumption by issuing laws so that the health issues reduce therefore in the end the cost of treating and dealing with these issues is believed to be high, could be used in other areas to improve the lives of their nations in areas like education, technology and other unsolved health issues like cancer.
Although sugar is an
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important
reason for
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a lot of
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health
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issues
, it is one of the top commodities that
being traded
in our world which
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makes
it
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hard
to formulate regulations to
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reduce
its consumption,
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so
who should be taking the lead to solve these
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health
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issues
and what are the solutions that we can
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come
up with to
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help
eliminate these
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issues
? History has shown that
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governments
and
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health
organizations have worked to regulate its consumption by issuing laws
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so
that the
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health
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issues
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reduce
therefore
in the
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end
the cost of treating and dealing with these
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issues
is believed
to be high, could be
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used
in other areas to
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improve
the
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lives
of their nations in areas like education, technology and other unsolved
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health
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issues
like cancer.
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IELTS essay Sugar Consumption and its health issues

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
130 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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