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Successful companies use advertising to make more sales. What can make an advertisement very effective? Do you think this is a bad thing or a good thing for the society?

Advertisement is one of the essentials part of today’s society. Successful companies are using marketing to get more profit. This essay will highlights the factors making the advertisement more effective and discuss some advantages about marketing for public. Turning the first question, the global market is one of the crucial parts of ordinary people’s life. Due to lockdown, the online shopping is widespread throughout the globe, the business owners try to sell their product virtually using the social platforms such as Instagram. It is one of the profitable paths to advertise the product. For example, the pop-star earn the money advertising the product in the famous Internet resource, hence the ordinary people are attracted and buy the product showed by famous people. Secondly, the advertisement is become as film with own scenario line. In the past, the advertisement was presented at the same way and was boring to watch. However, nowadays for attracting people, the advertising campaign became more unique and, undoubtedly, the items are sold faster. Public receives more opportunities from advisements. Firstly, the people can choose the product due to availability of enormous numbers of advertisements. To expand that, through the advertisement shows the opportunity of the products, therefore, if the advertisement campaigns are more, the individuals will choose the items suits their necessity. Secondly, the marketing gives the additional job places for people. The job market encounters the big troubles by now, therefore creating advertisement are opening new opportunities for youngers and professional people to get job in marketing sphere. To draw the conclusion, virtual marketing through social platform and interesting advertise campaign add a big effort to sell their products. In addition, variety of products and workforce availability lead to develop the advertisement throughout the globe. The government and public should create the procedures how to control the advertisement projects for matching requirements.
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Advertisement
is one of the essentials part of
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today
’s society. Successful
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companies
are using
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marketing
to
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get
more profit. This essay will
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highlights
the factors making the
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advertisement
more effective and discuss
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some
advantages about
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marketing
for public.

Turning the
first
question, the global market is one of the crucial parts of ordinary
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people’s
life. Due to lockdown, the online shopping is widespread throughout the globe, the business owners try to sell their
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product
virtually
using the social platforms such as Instagram. It is one of the profitable paths to advertise the
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product
.
For example
, the pop-star earn the money advertising the
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product
in the
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famous
Internet resource,
hence
the ordinary
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people
are attracted
and
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buy
the
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product
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showed
by
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famous
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people
.
Secondly
, the
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advertisement
is become
as film with
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own
scenario line. In the past, the
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advertisement
was presented
at the same way and was boring to
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watch
.
However
, nowadays for attracting
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people
, the advertising campaign became more unique and,
undoubtedly
, the items
are sold
faster.

Public receives more opportunities from
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advisements
.
Firstly
, the
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people
can choose the
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product
due to availability of enormous numbers of
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advertisements
. To expand that, through the
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advertisement
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shows
the opportunity of the
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products
,
therefore
, if the
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advertisement
campaigns are more, the individuals will choose the items suits their necessity.
Secondly
, the
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marketing
gives the additional job places for
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people
. The job market encounters the
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big
troubles by
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now
,
therefore
creating
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advertisement
are opening new opportunities for
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youngers
and professional
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people
to
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get
job in
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marketing
sphere.

To draw the conclusion, virtual
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marketing
through social platform and interesting advertise campaign
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add
a
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big
effort to sell their
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products
.
In addition
, variety of
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products
and workforce availability lead to develop the
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advertisement
throughout the globe. The
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government
and public should create the procedures how to control the
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advertisement
projects for matching requirements.
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IELTS essay Successful companies use advertising to make more sales. What can make an advertisement very effective? Do you think this is a bad thing or a good thing for the society?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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