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Studying hard can cause stress among children. What should they do to reduce stress ?

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It is undeniable that hard acedemic work can lead to stress among students. What should we do to help them to de-stress? For this essay I try to show some solution to this problem. The most conspicuous explanation I think we consider is that they should make time for listening to music. What I am trying to say is that the melodies can make significant contribution to mental health. Research has found that, if people enjoy music in six minutes, tension decreases by sixty-one percent. By that way, students may have a restful feel, can be limited the increased heart rate, decreased blood pressure also stress hormones. What is more, listening to their favourate songs bring about a positive flow energy in a person. I mean for many, classical music or songs with slow melodies are mind-numbing and, occasionally, it can counterproductive. Instead of forcing to listen to the music they do not like, they should take a few moments to find out a song suit themselves which helps them to refresh the mind more easily. When they have a better feeling, they will perform better which means listening to music can stimulate the improvement work effeciency. A further way to tackle to this issue is that they should get adequate sleep. Undoutedly, getting enough sleep is able to have a huge effect on our mental and emotion. For example, if people don’t sleep enough, they may have negative feelings like stress and fatique the next day. Therefore, learners have to sleep at least seven to eight hours per day to ready for a hard day. Moreover, having a good quality of sleep is good for memory improvement. It is due to the fact that, a full rest make their mind become more intelligent and assist in processing information when they make up. Inaddition, sleeping after studying is a key factor ìnluencing consolidating new data into memories and helps them store it longer in their brain. To sum up, with the conclusion stated above including enjoying music and caring about quality of sleep, I think they are good answer to zap stress. Students should follow one of these ways to relive stress and made school life more easy.
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hard
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work can lead to
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stress
among students. What should we do to
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help
them to de-
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stress
? For this essay I try to
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show
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some
solution to this problem.

The most conspicuous explanation I
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think
we consider is that they should
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make
time for listening to
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music
. What I am trying to say is that the melodies can
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make
significant contribution to mental health. Research has found that, if
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people
enjoy
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music
in six minutes, tension decreases by sixty-one percent. By that way, students may have a restful feel, can
be limited
the increased heart rate, decreased blood pressure
also
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stress
hormones.
What is more
, listening to their
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favourate
songs bring about a
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positive
flow energy in a person. I mean for
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many
, classical
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music
or songs with slow melodies are mind-numbing and,
occasionally
, it
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can counterproductive
.
Instead
of forcing
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to listen
to the
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music
they do not like, they should take a few moments to find out a song suit themselves which
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helps
them to refresh the mind more
easily
. When they have a better feeling, they will perform better which means listening to
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music
can stimulate the improvement work
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effeciency
.

A
further
way to tackle to this issue is that they should
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get
adequate
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sleep
.
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Undoutedly
, getting
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enough
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sleep
is able to have a huge effect on our mental and emotion.
For example
, if
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people
don’t
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sleep
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enough
, they may have
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negative
feelings like
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stress
and
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fatique
the
next
day.
Therefore
, learners
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have to
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sleep
at least seven to eight hours per day to ready for a
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day.
Moreover
, having a
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good
quality of
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sleep
is
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good
for memory improvement. It is due to the fact that, a full rest
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make
their mind become more intelligent and assist in processing information when they
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make
up.
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Inaddition
, sleeping after studying is a key factor
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ìnluencing
consolidating new data into memories and
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helps
them store it longer in their brain.

To sum up, with the conclusion stated above including enjoying
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music
and caring about quality of
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sleep
, I
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think
they are
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good
answer to zap
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stress
. Students should follow one of these ways to relive
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stress
and made school life more easy.
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IELTS essay Studying hard can cause stress among children. What should they do to reduce stress?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
368 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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