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Study needs time, peace and comfort, whereas employment needs the same thing. Someone says it is impossible to combine those two because one distracts one another. Do you think this is realistic in our life today? v.1

Study needs time, peace and comfort, whereas employment needs the same thing. Someone says it is impossible to combine those two because one distracts one another. Do you think this is realistic in our life today? v. 1
Learning requires a great deal of focus and dedication and since jobs also require the same, some people opine that it is not possible to pursue studies and employment at the same time. I do not quite agree with this view. In my opinion, in this age of e-learning it is perfectly possible for a committed person to study without quitting their job. To begin with, online classes have made learning possible from anywhere. Actually, people can now learn even during their leisure hours at work. Hence, any employee interested in obtaining higher academic qualifications can enrol in an online course without quitting their job. Almost every university now offers online programs for working persons interested in upgrading their skills. The main advantage of enrolling in an online course is that students can learn at a time convenient to them. There is no need to go to a college to attend the classes. All it requires is effective time management. The internet has made learning even easier for working professionals. It is a treasure trove of information. Actually many websites provide online tutorials that anyone can use. For example, anyone can learn coding or website designing online with the help of online tutorials available on the internet. There is no need to even enrol in a course. This feature is particularly beneficial for people employed in the software sector. Since they have to constantly upgrade their skills and learn new programming languages as they arrive, the online tutorials are a boon for them. To conclude, in this age of the internet and online learning programs it is perfectly possible to work and study at the same time.
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Learning
requires a great deal of focus and dedication and since jobs
also
require the same,
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some
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people
opine that it is not
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possible
to pursue studies and employment at the same
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time
. I do not quite
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agree
with this view. In my opinion, in this age of e-learning it is
perfectly
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possible
for a committed person to study without quitting their job.

To
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begin
with,
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online
classes have made
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learning
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possible
from anywhere. Actually,
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people
can
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now
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learn
even during their leisure hours at work.
Hence
, any employee interested in obtaining higher academic qualifications can enrol in an
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online
course without quitting their job. Almost every university
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now
offers
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online
programs for working persons interested in upgrading their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. The main advantage of enrolling in an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
course is that students can
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learn
at a
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time
convenient to them. There is no need to go to a college to attend the classes. All it requires is effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
management.

The internet has made
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learning
even easier for working professionals. It is a treasure trove of information. Actually
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many
websites provide
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online
tutorials that anyone can
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use
.
For example
, anyone can
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learn
coding or website designing
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online
with the
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help
of
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online
tutorials available on the internet. There is no need to even enrol in a course. This feature is
particularly
beneficial for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
employed in the software sector. Since they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
constantly
upgrade their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
new programming languages as they arrive, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
tutorials are a boon for them.

To conclude
, in this age of the internet and
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
programs it is
perfectly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
possible
to work and study at the same
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time
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay Study needs time, peace and comfort, whereas employment needs the same thing. Someone says it is impossible to combine those two because one distracts one another. Do you think this is realistic in our life today? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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