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Studies show that many criminals have a low of education For this reason people that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can ge a job when leave prison Do you agree or disagree v.2

Studies show that many criminals have a low of education For this reason people that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can ge a job when leave prison v. 2
Research indicate that a lot of criminals derived from the bad educated class. Several people argue that the most effective solution to decline crime rate is to provide wrongdoers with a good education in jail and as a result, they will have countless opportunities for finding a suitable job to meet their basic needs after leaving prison. I partly agree with this view. To begin with, implementing some education programs for criminals has some positive influences. First and foremost, education is a good way to provide some essential skills for offenders in order to seek a job for making a living in the life when being released back into society. For example, if offenders are taught some specific skills for careers such as tailoring or carpentry and so on, it will be easier for them to have a suitable job which brings them an income sourse. Therefore, they will have a chance of rehabilitation. In addition, it also helps criminals aware of the value of themselves. The fact shows that if offenders realize that they are still appreciated in society, they will fell more confident on themselves and make an effort to become an useful member in community. However, there are some other methods to decrease the level of crime besides running education campaigns for prisoners. Firstly, the governments should impose different punishments depending on the level dangerous of crime. For instance, in terms of serious crime, serving a long prison sentence will act as a deterrent and threat of wrongdoers to avoid re-offending. Moreover, education should be provided for the young in initial stage rather than when they are put in jail. Due to the fact that children are not enough mature and they likely have tendency to imitate bad behaviour, they will broke the law without their parents' observation. Giving youngsters knowledge originally to understand whether what they do is legal or illegal is better method instead waiting till they commit a crime. In conclusion, although there are a total of advantages which educating prisoners brings for reducing crime, I strongly believe that it is not the best solution, hence, the government should enact some other measures such as stricter punishments to deter an increase in crime rate.
Research indicate that
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a lot of
criminals derived from the
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bad
educated
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class
. Several
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people
argue that the most effective solution to decline
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crime
rate is to provide wrongdoers with a
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good
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education
in jail and
as a result
, they will have countless opportunities for finding a suitable job to
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meet
their basic needs after leaving prison. I partly
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agree
with this view.

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begin
with, implementing
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some
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education
programs for criminals has
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some
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positive
influences.
First
and foremost,
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education
is a
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good
way to provide
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some
essential
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skills
for offenders in order to seek a job for making a living in the life when
being released
back into society.
For example
, if offenders
are taught
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some
specific
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skills
for careers such as tailoring or carpentry and
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so
on, it will be easier for them to have a suitable job which brings them an income
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sourse
.
Therefore
, they will have a chance of rehabilitation.
In addition
, it
also
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helps
criminals aware of the value of themselves. The fact
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shows
that if offenders realize that they are
still
appreciated in society, they will
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fell
more confident on themselves and
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make
an effort to become
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an
useful member in community.

However
, there are
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some
other methods to decrease the level of
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crime
besides
running
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education
campaigns for prisoners.
Firstly
, the
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governments
should impose
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different
punishments depending on the level
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dangerous
of
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crime
.
For instance
, in terms of serious
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crime
, serving a long prison sentence will act as a deterrent and threat of wrongdoers to avoid re-offending.
Moreover
,
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education
should
be provided
for the young in initial stage
rather
than when they
are put
in jail. Due to the fact that children are not
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enough
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mature and
they likely have tendency to imitate
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bad
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behaviour
, they will
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broke
the law without their
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parents&
#039; observation. Giving youngsters knowledge
originally
to understand whether what they do is legal or illegal is better method
instead
waiting till they commit a crime.

In conclusion
, although there are a total of advantages which educating prisoners brings for reducing
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crime
, I
strongly
believe that it is not the best solution,
hence
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should enact
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other measures such as stricter punishments to deter an increase in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
rate.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Studies show that many criminals have a low of education For this reason people that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can ge a job when leave prison v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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