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Studies show that criminals get low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce the crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Studies show that criminals get low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce the crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. d8bX
Education for offenders during imprisonment as a method to reduce the rate of crime has evolved as a major topic of concern in today’s society. While I agree that such a solution is effective to reduce crime, I am convinced that  there are many better ways of reducing crime. I accept that education for prisoners may contribute to the reduction of the crime rate. The primary reason is that such a form of education could provide offenders with the working skills that are essential when they return to the community. With fortified job prospects, prisoners may, therefore, earn a living after leaving the prison and are less likely to commit a crime again. Another significant reason is that education could show the offenders that they are still appreciated by society. By this way, they may feel an enhanced sense of humanity and community, and become better citizens after their prison years. These people may then inspire many others in the public to live without crime However, I am firmly of the opinion that education for offenders is not the best solution to reduce crime. This form of education is offered only to those who have committed a crime, and therefore has far less preventive value, compared to other stronger solutions. For example, severe punishments such as longer imprisonment for criminals could deter criminal acts by many people in the public who have the intention to carry out a crime. There are also other educational methods that may have a stronger and more long-lasting impact on the reduction of crime. An excellent example of this is crime education at school, which helps equip students with the necessary knowledge about crime and crime prevention. This measure is undeniably a more sustainable crime-fighting solution than education for criminals. To conclude, I firmly believe that although educating prisoners is an effective way to reduce crime, it is not the best solution, as there are more preventive and sustainable measures such as crime education at school and stricter punishments for criminals.
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during imprisonment as a method to
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today
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crime
, I
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that
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there are
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many
better ways of reducing crime.

I accept that
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education
for prisoners may contribute to the reduction of the
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crime
rate. The primary reason is that such a form of
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education
could provide
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offenders
with the working
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skills
that are essential when they return to the community. With fortified job prospects, prisoners may,
therefore
, earn a living after leaving the prison and are less likely to commit a
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crime
again. Another significant reason is that
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education
could
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show
the
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offenders
that they are
still
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people
may then inspire
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others in the public to
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live
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However
, I am
firmly
of the opinion that
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education
for
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offenders
is not the best
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solution
to
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reduce
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crime
. This form of
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education
is offered
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only
to those who have committed a
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crime
, and
therefore
has far less preventive value, compared to other stronger
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solutions
.
For example
, severe punishments such as longer imprisonment for criminals could deter criminal acts by
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many
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people
in the public who have the intention to carry out a
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crime
. There are
also
other educational methods that may have a stronger and more long-lasting impact on the reduction of
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crime
. An excellent example of this is
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crime
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education
at school, which
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helps
equip students with the necessary knowledge about
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crime
and
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crime
prevention. This measure is
undeniably
a more sustainable crime-fighting
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solution
than
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education
for criminals.

To conclude
, I
firmly
believe that although educating prisoners is an effective way to
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reduce
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crime
, it is not the best
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solution
, as there are more preventive and sustainable measures such as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
at school and stricter punishments for criminals.
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IELTS essay Studies show that criminals get low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce the crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison.

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