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In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home? nK2g
I fully agree with the above statement, teenagers want to spend more time with their friends but not with their parents. One of the reasons behind it can be carefree lifestyle children wanted to adopt, with no responsibility. So, in my opinion parents should make their understand that they should spend quality time with their children. Reason- Children want to spend time with their friends because they want to new learn different things and spending time with their parents is just wastage of time. Another reason behind it can be the they feel parents as burden not as the responsibilities. On the other hand, in my opinion parents should not force their children to spend time with their children but can engage in the activities which are they interested. Due to which they would love to spend time together and also able to learn new things,
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quality
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with their children.

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with their friends
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as burden not as the responsibilities.

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time
together and
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able to learn new things,

IELTS essay In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

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146 words
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