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students should pay their full university fees themselves do you agree or disagree?

students should pay their full university fees themselves 6aGV3
People argue that students should have a responsibility to pay their whole education fees in university on their own without seeking help from parents or any other financial funds like scholarship. I completely disagree with this statement but it has some positive effects too. This essay shall discuss on both views. Fistly, university students are young enough to do work as part-time job and can earn money by earning money on own they can be aware of money and will not spend on unnecessary things. For instance, if students are paying fees on their own they definetly value the money however, they will spend money even more carefully. On the other hand, students should not pay whole fees by themselves because this is an age of learning and getting greater eduction so, in future they can get their desired job. However, several econimical weaker students are doing part time job for payment of their fees and it has major impact on their studies. For instance, numerous student does job while the time of exam and possibilities of getting lower grade. Therefor, help from parents or educational funds like scholarship should be provide to the students so, they can have relief from a burden of paying fees and also can concentrate more on their studies without any tension or stress. In conclusion, students should try to pay their fees but sometimes better to seek help from funds so their study will not get disturb. Consequently, job will not have any unnecessary impact on education if enough funds are provided to students.
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argue that
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students
should have a responsibility to pay their whole education

fees in university on their
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own
without seeking
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help
from parents or any other financial

funds like scholarship. I completely disagree with this statement
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but
it has
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some


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positive
effects too. This essay shall discuss on both views.

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Fistly
, university
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students
are young
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enough
to do work as part-time
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job
and can earn

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money
by earning money on
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own
they can be aware of money and will not spend on unnecessary things.

For instance
, if
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students
are paying
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fees
on their
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own
they
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definetly
value the money

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however
, they will spend money even more
carefully
.

On the other hand
,
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students
should not pay whole
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fees
by themselves
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because
this is

an age of learning and getting greater
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eduction
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so
, in future they can
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get
their

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desired
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job
.
However
, several
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econimical
weaker
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students
are doing
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part time
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job
for payment of

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their
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fees
and it has major impact on their studies.
For instance
, numerous
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student


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does
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job
while the time of exam and possibilities of getting lower grade. Therefor,

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help
from parents or educational funds like scholarship should be
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provide
to the

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students
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so
, they can have relief from a burden of paying
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fees
and
also
can

concentrate more on their studies without any tension or
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stress
.

In conclusion
,
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students
should try to pay their
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fees
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but
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sometimes
better to seek

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help
from funds
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so
their study will not
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get
disturb.
Consequently
,
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job
will not have

any unnecessary impact on education if
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enough
funds
are provided
to
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students
.

IELTS essay students should pay their full university fees themselves

Essay
  American English
14 paragraphs
260 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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