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do you agree with student working?

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Working is one of the most important factors in human life. Everyone have their own way for earning money to could spend their life as well as they can working is not inherited but it's adventitious which we must learn it over the years based on our interests. I agree that teenagers should learn working since the school time due to the following reasons. Teenage time is the best period to learn responsibility and know how to handle problems without being dependent on anyone. Because most of children think that they can count on their parents or elders whenever they want and that makes them run away from difficulties All of us spend a specific time with our parents money so we couldn't understand incomes difficulties, but if we start to work from young age we will get better over the years and learn how to stand on our own feet and have more information about our talent interest and future job. School is an environment or place that we learn. So its better to achieve what we need, in addition to academic studying (lessons), culture, manners or behavior, how to work is also very important and in my own opinion it can affect more.

Working is one of the most This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 factors in human life. Everyone The pronoun 'Everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "has", "had".hashad
have
 their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 way for earning money to could spend their life as well
 as they can The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "work"work
working
 is not inherited This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 it's adventitious which we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenrollgetreadstudypick upreceive
learn
 it over the years based on our interests. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
 should You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenrollgetreadstudypick upreceive
learn
 working since the school time due to the following reasons.

Teenage time is the best period to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenrollgetreadstudypick upreceive
learn
 responsibility and know how to handle problems without being dependent on anyone. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
Because
After 'most of', you should use 'the' ("most of the children") or simply say "most children".most of the childrenmost children
most of children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 that they can count on their parents or elders whenever they want and that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createsconstructsmanufacturesproduces
makes
 them run away from Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphdifficulties.difficulties!difficulties?difficulties:difficulties,difficulties;
difficulties


All of us spend a specific time with our parents money This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 we couldn't understand incomes difficulties, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 if we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 to work from young age we will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 better over the years and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenrollgetreadstudypick upreceive
learn
 how to stand on our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 feet and have more information about our talent interest and future job.

School is an environment or place that we You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenrollgetreadstudypick upreceive
learn
. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 its better to achieve what we need, in addition
 to academic studying (lessons), culture, manners or behavior, how to work is also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 and in my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 opinion it can Did you mean "effect"?effect
affect
 more. 