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students should choose a university major that prepares them for high paying careers

Choosing a university major is one of the most daunting decisions we make in our adult lives as it determines our future and must be made very carefully. Some believe that students should choose a major that will provide financial rewards later. Personally, I disagree and feel that the choice should be based on passion rather than income. Contrary to the belief that university should prepare you for a high earning salary, a person's interest should be the key factor when choosing a major. Indeed, if you do what you love, you never work a day in your life. This means that if your dream is to become a surgeon, for instance, then performing operations every day will not be boring, but a dream come true. The same goes for someone who loves art. Working in a gallery each day, surrounded by what you love, will feel like being paid for doing your favorite hobby. So, students should choose to major in an area where they can see themselves being happy and fulfilled. If a high-paying salary comes along with that, then it is a bonus. In addition, choosing a major based solely on financial reward rather than on fulfilment can lead to a life of misery. We spend most of our lives at work. Even if the salary is exceptional, and you can afford your dream home, holidays and expensive luxuries, who wants to be doing something they do no't feel inspired by? Evidence shows that this will lead to stress and regret later in life when you discover that money cannot buy happiness. Therefore, we should study something that will lead to a path of fulfilment and satisfaction. It is better to look back and be happy with the life we have lived, rather than the money we made. To conclude, choosing a university major is a huge decision for many people who are just at the beginning of the rest of their lives. It is a decision that can shape their future and therefore should be chosen with care. Although potential salary is an important consideration, I strongly believe that following our dreams rather than living a life of regret should be the guiding factor when making this choice.
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believe that students should choose a
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major
that will provide financial rewards later.
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, I disagree and feel that the choice should
be based
on passion
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rather
than income.

Contrary to the belief that university should prepare you for a high earning
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salary
, a person's interest should be the key factor when choosing a
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major
.
Indeed
, if you do what you
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love
, you never work a day in your
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life
. This means that if your
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dream
is to become a surgeon,
for instance
, then performing operations every day will not be boring,
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but
a
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dream
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come
true. The same goes for someone who
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loves
art. Working in a gallery each day, surrounded by what you
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love
, will feel like
being paid
for doing your favorite hobby.
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So
, students should choose to
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major
in an area where they can
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see
themselves being happy and fulfilled. If a high-paying
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salary
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comes
along with that, then it is a bonus.

In addition
, choosing a
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major
based
solely
on financial reward
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rather
than on
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fulfilment
can lead to a
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life
of misery. We spend most of our
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lives
at work. Even if the
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salary
is exceptional, and you can afford your
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dream
home, holidays and expensive luxuries, who wants to be doing something they do no't feel inspired by? Evidence
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shows
that this will lead to
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stress
and regret later in
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life
when you discover that money cannot
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buy
happiness.
Therefore
, we should study something that will lead to a path of
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fulfilment
and satisfaction. It is better to look back and be happy with the
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life
we have
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lived
,
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rather
than the money we made.

To conclude
, choosing a university
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major
is a huge decision for
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many
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people
who are
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just
at the beginning of the rest of their
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lives
. It is a decision that can shape their future and
therefore
should
be chosen
with care. Although potential
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salary
is an
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important
consideration, I
strongly
believe that following our
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dreams
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rather
than living a
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life
of regret should be the guiding factor when making this choice.
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IELTS essay students should choose a university major that prepares them for high paying careers

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
372 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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