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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In recent age, a debatable media, academic and intellectual issues are dividing people toward the question ‘Are there any natural talent or not? ’ Those, who are supporting natural talent, they focused mainly of genes characteristics while those who opposed the aforementioned logic have strongly focused on role of socialization and training in their family life and educational institutes. From my point of view, although both of them have enough supporting logic, I support, the second positions that training and socialization is more important than genes. Some people believed that only a few number of people have natural gene characteristics for developing a musicians and sportsman in later life. Those who have a positive gene element from their family and birth, they will be a good sportsman and musicians. From their understanding, they believed that biological genes promote natural geniuses for the development of great-men personalities. For examples, they try to identify Pandit Ravi Shankar, who was an internationally renowned and great Indian musicians of Maihar Gharana, and his daughters Nora Jones and Anouska Sankar. As a musicians, both Nora and Anouska’s greatness is mainly descendent on the natural genes characteristics from their father. They also compare Albert Einstein with others as a natural talent from their genes. However, majority of the people firmly believed that natural talent is a fake issues. They mainly focused on the role of socialization in their family life; training and practices in their educational institutes. Sociologists identified this as ‘nurture’ issues. Echoed with them, from my perspective, I also believed that both of these factors (socialization and training) are more than genes. Let me try to explain this fact with logic and examples. Firstly, role of socialization penetrate strong personality of a child. If a parents try to develop their children with enough supports, they will able to furnish them as a good quality player. In addition to this, educational institutes also have a positive role for the development of sportsman. If a country’s educational institutes facilitate their student through rigorous training and exercise from primary stage, they will turn to be a good player in future. For example, many east European countries like the former USSR, Ukraine and Romania have the best gymnastics player than other countries. They provide rigorous training and adequate facilities for their player from early childhood, while other countries do not have enough concentration on this issues. In conclusion, both sides have their own logic in the question ‘which one is the prime factors: gene or socialization and training for developing as a musicians or sportsman? From my point of view, I strongly prefer on role of socialization and training (nurture) are the prerequisite to be a good players or musicians than biological gene (nature).
In recent age, a debatable media, academic and intellectual issues are dividing
people
toward the question ‘Are there any
natural
talent
or not? ’ Those,
who
are supporting
natural
talent
, they focused
mainly
of genes characteristics while those
who
opposed the aforementioned
logic
have
strongly
focused on
role
of socialization and
training
in their family life and
educational
institutes. From my point of view, although both of them have
enough
supporting
logic
, I support, the second positions that
training
and socialization is more
important
than genes.

Some
people
believed
that
only
a few number of
people
have
natural
gene characteristics for developing a
musicians
and sportsman in later life. Those
who
have a
positive
gene element from their family and birth, they will be a
good
sportsman and
musicians
. From their understanding, they
believed
that biological genes promote
natural
geniuses for the development of great-
men
personalities. For examples, they try to identify Pandit Ravi Shankar,
who
was an
internationally
renowned and great Indian
musicians
of
Maihar
Gharana
, and his daughters Nora Jones and
Anouska
Sankar
. As a
musicians
, both Nora and
Anouska
’s greatness is
mainly
descendent
on the
natural
genes characteristics from their father. They
also
compare Albert Einstein with others as a
natural
talent
from their genes.

However
,
majority of
the
people
firmly
believed
that
natural
talent
is a fake issues. They
mainly
focused on the
role
of socialization in their family life;
training
and practices in their
educational
institutes. Sociologists identified this as ‘nurture’ issues. Echoed with them, from my perspective, I
also
believed
that both of these factors (socialization and
training)
are more than genes.
Let
me try to
explain
this fact with
logic
and examples.
Firstly
,
role
of socialization penetrate strong personality of a child. If
a parents
try to develop their children with
enough
supports, they
will able
to furnish them as a
good
quality
player
.
In addition
to this,
educational
institutes
also
have a
positive
role
for the development of sportsman. If a
country’s
educational
institutes facilitate their student through rigorous
training
and exercise from primary stage, they will turn to be a
good
player
in future
.
For example
,
many
east European
countries
like the former USSR, Ukraine and Romania have the best gymnastics
player
than other
countries
. They provide rigorous
training
and adequate facilities for their
player
from early childhood, while other
countries
do not have
enough
concentration on
this
issues.

In conclusion
, both sides have their
own
logic
in the question ‘which one is the prime factors: gene or socialization and
training
for developing as a
musicians
or sportsman? From my point of view, I
strongly
prefer on
role
of socialization and
training
(nurture) are the prerequisite to be a
good
players
or
musicians
than biological gene (nature).
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IELTS essay It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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