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students should be encouraged to choose vocational courses at university instead of more traditional courses. Discuss

students should be encouraged to choose vocational courses at university instead of more traditional courses. Discuss KWxW6
Some people believe that volunteering while on vacation is better for the student than for the money. We need to think about it. Many parents want their child to do volunteer work, because they have practical experience, they understand it in the sense of complex people. You can also not deny that volunteering gives you a sense of happiness to work for money, students, do not need to think too much about it, do not need to be exhausted on something. However, volunteer work can sometimes be difficult, and many, many people say that it is voluntary work, and it is very boring. Working for money, they become more and more mature. They will understand the meaning of money from day to day. In the end, I think students should opt for volunteers. It won't give you much money, but it does give you joy. It's best if you choose this one thing that should really interest you.
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IELTS essay students should be encouraged to choose vocational courses at university instead of more traditional courses. Discuss

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