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Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? v.5

Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? v. 5
University education is the most important milestone of an individual's professional and personal growth. The time spent during university leaves a deep impact on most of the students. Students benefit from the professional relationship built during this time as well as the learnings they get from the mentors and fellow students. The living environment plays a key role for an individual student for the duration of their education. Broadly, there are two modes of residency a student can choose, university dormitories and apartments in a community. Both have their own positives and negatives. We will shed some light on both to strike a basic comparison. Most large universities facilitate dormitories for its students. While a few mandate the students to live in dormitories, most keep it optional for the students to choose. With the university's perspective, students staying in hostels enable them to maintain discipline and make it easy for them to administer the students. It becomes easy for the University's administration to engage students for events, motivate students with different programs and furthermore it helps the university to keep an eye on the student's progress in non-academic activities too. With the Student's perspective, staying in the University hostel is convenient, since if the university campus is really large, a student would waste a lot of time in commute is staying at a far place. It also helps a student to have group study sessions and working groups to grow in academics and co-curricular activities. Since hostel accommodation is not suitable for many students because of few negatives like ragging, harassment and lack of privacy, many students prefer to have their own arrangement. Students prefer to live in apartments in communities either sharing with a fellow student or living as a paying guest with a family. This has many advantages such as the students can tailor the room as per their demand and preference. It also helps students to live an affordable living and save the cost. Students get their privacy and space to study without getting disturbed by nuances. While it has advantages, it can also make a student lonely which can increase the stress resulting into problems like depression. In a nutshell, every student can have their personal preferences and should decide what suits them best. Personally, I would prefer living in a hostel accommodation where I can learn new things, make new friends and build new bonds with beautiful experiences. As every individual is unique, their needs are unique, University Administration can work towards making the hostels suit to the students’ needs as much as possible. Students can use the experience to the betterment of their career.
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education is the most
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important
milestone of an individual's professional and personal growth. The time spent during
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university
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leaves
a deep impact on most of the
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students
.
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Students
benefit from the professional relationship built during this time
as well
as the learnings they
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get
from the mentors and fellow
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students
. The
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living
environment plays a key role for an individual
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student
for the duration of their education.
Broadly
, there are two modes of residency a
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student
can choose,
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university
dormitories and apartments in a community. Both have their
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own
positives and negatives. We will shed
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some
light on both to strike a basic comparison.

Most large
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universities
facilitate dormitories for its
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students
. While a
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few mandate
the
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students
to
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live
in dormitories, most
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keep
it optional for the
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students
to choose. With the university's perspective,
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students
staying in
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hostels
enable them to maintain discipline and
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make
it easy for them to administer the
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students
. It becomes easy for the University's administration to engage
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students
for
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events
, motivate
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students
with
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different
programs and
furthermore
it
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helps
the
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university
to
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keep
an eye on the student's progress in non-academic activities too. With the Student's perspective, staying in the
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University
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hostel
is convenient, since if the
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university
campus is
really
large, a
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student
would waste
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a lot of
time in commute is staying at a far place. It
also
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helps
a
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student
to have group study sessions and working groups to grow in academics and co-curricular activities.

Since
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hostel
accommodation is not suitable for
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many
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students
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because
of few negatives like ragging, harassment and lack of privacy,
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many
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students
prefer to have their
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own
arrangement.
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prefer to
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live
in apartments in communities either sharing with a fellow
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student
or
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living
as a paying guest with a family. This has
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many
advantages such as the
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students
can tailor the room as per their demand and preference. It
also
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helps
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students
to
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live
an affordable
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living
and save the cost.
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Students
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get
their privacy and space to study without getting disturbed by nuances. While it has advantages, it can
also
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make
a
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student
lonely which can increase the
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stress
resulting into problems like depression.

In a nutshell, every
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student
can have their personal preferences and should decide what suits them best.
Personally
, I would prefer
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living
in a
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hostel
accommodation where I can learn new things,
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make
new friends and build new bonds with
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beautiful
experiences. As every individual is unique, their needs are unique,
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University
Administration can work towards making the
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hostels
suit to the
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students’
needs as much as possible.
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Students
can
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use
the experience to the betterment of their career.
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IELTS essay Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? v. 5

Essay
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4 paragraphs
440 words
6.0
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