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Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Whether a student is influenced by their teacher or friend is a great interest of debate. Some might believe that teachers can influence the student more. As far as I am concerned, I feel that it' s the friend that the student gets easily influenced. I will evaluate the reasons in the following passages. To begin with, friends are one that student spends most of their time with so, it is much easier to get highly affected by them. In other words, students share most of their time with their buddies. Since they are always together hanging out and they playing around, therefore, friends can considerably affect each other. My personal experience life is a compelling example. For instance, when I was in high school, I stayed in a hostel for five years and I have my best friend, with whom I spend a lot of time since we share the same room thus, we are very close to each other. She loves writing a diary and completes it every night. She writes about her class and everything at the end of the day, hence I got the habit of writing the diary from her. Until now, even after five years of leaving my school life, I still jot down my daily activities in my diary. I keep it safe and all thanks to her that I can always read my memories especially of school life which gives me immense pleasure. Hence, this illustrates how a friend can have a huge influence on students. Secondly, it is much easier to get influence from friends because of the same age group. What I mean is as the student most likely to get influenced by children of the same age group. It is always more comfortable sharing views and ideas especially with a person of the same age. And, for students, it is most likely to get intrigued by their friends rather than a teacher. For example, my brother is in the fifth standard, his friends at school has brought a toy in their class, so the very next day, my brother also took his favorite toy to his school. Thus, this example demonstrates how students get easily influenced by friends of the same age. In summation, in my opinion, students are more influenced by their friends than by their teachers because they spend most of their time with their friends, and because friends are most of their age group hence more comfortable interacting and get influenced by them.
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by their
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or
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is a great interest of debate.
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might believe that
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teachers
can influence the
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student
more. As far as I
am concerned
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influenced. I will evaluate the reasons in the following passages.

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with,
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are one that
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student
spends most of their
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time
with
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get
highly
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affected
by them.
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,
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students
share most of their
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time
with their buddies. Since they are always together hanging
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out and
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around,
therefore
,
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friends
can
considerably
affect each other. My personal experience life is a compelling example.
For instance
, when I was in high
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school
, I stayed in a hostel for five years and I have my best
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friend
, with whom I spend
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a lot of
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time
since we share the same room
thus
, we are
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very
close to each other. She
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loves
writing a diary and completes it every night. She writes about her
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class
and everything at the
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end
of the day,
hence
I
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got
the habit of writing the diary from her. Until
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now
, even after five years of leaving my
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school
life, I
still
jot down my daily activities in my diary. I
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keep
it safe and all thanks to her that I can always read my memories
especially
of
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school
life which gives me immense pleasure.
Hence
, this illustrates how a
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friend
can have a huge influence on students.

Secondly
, it is much easier to
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get
influence from
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friends
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because
of the same
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age
group. What I mean is as the
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student
most likely to
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get
influenced by children of the same
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age
group. It is always more comfortable sharing views and
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ideas
especially
with a person of the same
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age
. And, for
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students
, it is most likely to
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get
intrigued by their
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friends
rather
than a
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teacher
.
For example
, my brother is in the fifth standard, his
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friends
at
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school
has brought a toy in their
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class
,
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so
the
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next
day, my brother
also
took his favorite toy to his
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school
.
Thus
, this example demonstrates how
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students
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get
easily
influenced by
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friends
of the same age.

In summation, in my opinion,
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students
are more influenced by their
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friends
than by their
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teachers
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because
they spend most of their
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time
with their
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, and
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because
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are most of their
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group
hence
more comfortable interacting and
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get
influenced by them.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
417 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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