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Some people think that there should be some strict control about noise. Other think they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuses both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that there should be some strict control about noise. Other think they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuses both views and give your opinion. v. 2
Some resident believe that noise have to strictly monitor while the opponent of this idea prefer make it louder. While there are benefit to people who want to make noise, I would argue that noise must be reduced and managed. On the one hand, it is benefit for some citizen like to make as much noise as they want have various reasons. Firstly, resident feel more comfortable and freedom when making noisy louder. They often increase maximize volume of love music in the weekend party without consider next-door neighbor complaint. Furthermore, the traffic and energy is result of modernization process. It is consequent of economic activities, no one think that there are no particular reasons to control noise. On the other hand, it seem to me that we must have laws and regulations to strict manage noise. The first reason is that the noise has harmful impact on people health. As the result of research, urban citizen often have not well sleep, they sudden wake up at the midnight due to traffic noisy such as from heavy truck, stack of factory around. They are more excite than who has well sleep. Beside, noise impact to work too. For instance, worker complain that they could not concentrate on job due to intrusive traffic sound from road also from next equipment. Productivities are decrease and defect production increase as consequently. In conclusion, making noise as much as possible fit to some people, it seem to me that noisy should be strictly monitor and reduce to making healthy life.
Some
resident
believe that
noise
have to
strictly
monitor while the opponent of this
idea
prefer
make
it louder. While there are benefit to
people
who want to
make
noise
, I would argue that
noise
must
be
reduced
and managed.

On the one hand, it is benefit for
some
citizen
like to
make
as much
noise
as they
want have
various reasons.
Firstly
, resident feel more comfortable and freedom when making noisy louder. They
often
increase maximize volume of
love
music in the weekend party without consider
next
-door neighbor complaint.
Furthermore
, the traffic and energy is result of modernization process. It is consequent of economic activities, no one
think
that there are no particular reasons to control noise.

On the other hand
, it
seem
to me that we
must
have laws and regulations to strict manage
noise
. The
first
reason is that the
noise
has harmful impact on
people
health. As the result of research, urban citizen
often
have not well
sleep
,
they sudden
wake up at the midnight due to traffic noisy such as from heavy truck, stack of factory around. They are more excite than who has well
sleep
. Beside,
noise
impact to work too.
For instance
, worker complain that they could not concentrate on job due to intrusive traffic sound from road
also
from
next
equipment.
Productivities
are decrease and defect production increase as
consequently
.

In conclusion
, making
noise
as much as possible fit to
some
people
, it
seem
to me that noisy should be
strictly
monitor
and
reduce
to making healthy life.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that there should be some strict control about noise. Other think they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuses both views and give your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
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