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Strategic alliance is a mutual agreement between two or more companies in order to work more effectively toward their goals. Strategic alliances can greatly increase profits for both companies, however, if the alliance does not succeed, it is easily disso v.1

Strategic alliance is a mutual agreement between two or more companies in order to work more effectively toward their goals. Strategic alliances can greatly increase profits for both companies, however, if the alliance does not succeed, it is easily disso v. 1
Nowadays, elderly people are not valued in the way they should in many countries. This essay discusses the origins of this lack of respect and explain some possible consequences. In my opinion, one of the main causes could be the different education provided to younger generations. This might lead to serious conflicts between juniors and seniors. Firstly, the lack of respect for older people might be caused by the changes in education and values between now and then. In other words, the focus of society could have shifted away from respecting seniors to appreciating the working force for keeping the economy running and paying taxes. A second reason could be the diminishing number of elderly people. Due to their shrinking presence, people might not pay them the same amount of respect as before. Moreover, the way we greet and talk to seniors might have become less formal and therefore less respectful over the years. Consequently, to what problems could this development lead? Paying insufficient respect to the older generation could lead to serious conflicts of interests between generations. For example, today’s workforce might refuse to pay pensions. Besides, older people could refuse to support the younger generations with helping them raise their children. In an extreme case, this could lead in a collapse of our social constructs. In addition, the lack of respect might affect the mental health of seniors and result in increased rates of depression or suicide. In conclusion, this essay elaborated various reasons and consequences for insufficient respect to the older generation in our societies. Overall, I think that this development is mainly based on the changing values in our society and should be taken very seriously since it has the potential to split the unspoken contract between older and younger generations.
Nowadays, elderly
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are not valued in the way they should in
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many
countries. This essay discusses the origins of this lack of
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respect
and
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explain
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some
possible consequences. In my opinion, one of the main causes could be the
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different
education provided to younger generations. This
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might
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lead
to serious conflicts between juniors and seniors.

Firstly
, the lack of
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respect
for
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older
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people
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might
be caused
by the
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changes
in education and values between
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now
and then.
In other words
, the focus of society could have shifted away from respecting seniors to appreciating the working force for keeping the economy running and paying taxes. A second reason could be the diminishing number of elderly
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people
. Due to their shrinking presence,
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people
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might
not pay them the same amount of
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respect
as
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before
.
Moreover
, the way we greet and talk to seniors
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might
have become less formal and
therefore
less respectful over the years.

Consequently
, to what problems could this development
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lead
? Paying insufficient
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respect
to the
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older
generation could
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lead
to serious conflicts of interests between generations.
For example
,
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today
’s workforce
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might
refuse to pay pensions.
Besides
,
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older
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people
could refuse to support the younger generations with helping them raise their children. In an extreme case, this could
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lead
in a collapse of our social constructs.
In addition
, the lack of
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respect
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might
affect the mental health of seniors and result in increased rates of depression or suicide.

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In
conclusion, this essay elaborated various reasons and consequences for insufficient
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respect
to the
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older
generation in our societies.
Overall
, I
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think
that this development is
mainly
based on the changing values in our society and should
be taken
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very
seriously
since it has the potential to split the unspoken contract between
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older
and younger generations.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Strategic alliance is a mutual agreement between two or more companies in order to work more effectively toward their goals. Strategic alliances can greatly increase profits for both companies, however, if the alliance does not succeed, it is easily disso v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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