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Every time I was asked the question “what do you want to be? ”, I always had one particular answer, to be an Engineer. Right from my childhood, I was fascinated by the machines around me. Just about anything from a ceiling fan to an aeroplane. And when I learnt the stories behind them, I was intrigued to learn the science behind them. One such machine that captivated me with its complex mechanisms obscured by its artistic build was automobiles. The alluring nature of automobiles and my curiosity to learn about their hidden complexity made me choose Automobile Engineering as my Bachelor’s degree. After careful and sedulous research, I chose Sri Venkateswara College of Engineering for my undergraduate. The course striking a perfect balance between practical and theoretical modules helped me get the basics right. The modules on Thermodynamics, Fluid mechanics and Mechanics of machines brought me closer to my quest. The module “Automotive Engines” in my second year of study backed up by the in-plant training I received from TVS Motor company revealed the science under the hood. During my time with them, I was trained by industrial experts on Engine Supporting Systems, Fuel Injection systems, Emission Standards, and other subsystems, all while being exposed to the industrial environment. The hands-on experience on Troubleshooting techniques, Dismantling and Assembly of an IC engine and a motorbike aided me to get the knack of servicing a two-wheeler to a point where I started servicing my motorbike by myself. Not just stopping with the two-wheelers, I wanted to extend my grasp onto four-wheelers. Accordingly, I made my way into an Internship with Ford Motor Company, where I was lectured by real-time professionals on Powertrain, Pollution Control, Vehicle Dynamics and many other topics. Working on the ever-occupied workshop (service floor) honed my Time Management, Resource Management, Budgeting, Team Working skills and other soft skills along with the technical ability to tune and service a four-wheeler. My perpetual desire for knowledge made me venture beyond the confines of my curriculum, pursuing a number of internships and courses. One such Internship with Elite Techno Groups made me acquainted with the concepts of FEA and CFD. Developing an affinity towards Computer Aided Engineering, I felt comfortable learning numerous CAD/CAM software such as SolidWorks, Autodesk Fusion 360, Creo Parametric and Ansys. Considering my skill set, I was chosen to lead the Design Team of “Traxion Offroading”, a squad representing my undergraduate institution in Baja SAE, an intercollegiate competition where undergraduate and graduate engineering students from all over India are challenged to design and build an off-road vehicle. This experience enhanced my Leadership and Mentorship Skills. The time I spent learning about Automotives and being involved with a variety of CAE software made me inclined to pursue my career in this field. In time, I picture myself as a proficient design engineer working for a reputed Automotive manufacturer like Bentley, where I can bring about progress to my career while contributing to the ever-growing industry. Hence after careful contemplation, I felt the need to pursue higher studies to be upskilled and keep up with the growing trends of the industry. Looking upon the prestigious car-makers like Bentley, Aston Martin, Rolls Royce, it was my instinct to choose their Home as the destination for my masters. The United Kingdom, apart from being one of the industrialised countries with excellent infrastructure, offers a unique engineering curriculum. Particularly the Automotive Engineering courses, that impart unparalleled skills, sought by leading car manufacturers stand unrivalled elsewhere in the world. On the hunt for my dream, I came upon the ultimate course that answers all my needs, offered by Coventry University. The industry-based curriculum and extensive facilities offered at your university make it the perfect niche to strengthen my knowledge. In Particular, the distinct modules in this course like Engineering Simulation and Analysis, Design Principles and Practise will bolster me with the in-demand design and software skills to attain the anticipated career goal. Therefore, I am applying to the Automotive Engineering MSc course at your University. I look forward to being a part of your renowned institution and in the long-term, an expert in the automotive sector, eventually leading the way for a team of budding passionate engineers.
Every
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time
I was
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asked the question
“what do you want to be? ”, I always had one particular answer, to be an Engineer. Right from my childhood, I
was fascinated
by
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the machines around me
.
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Just
about anything from a ceiling fan to an
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aeroplane
. And when I
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learnt
the stories behind them, I
was intrigued
to learn the science behind them. One such machine that captivated me with its complex mechanisms obscured by its artistic build was automobiles. The alluring nature of automobiles and my curiosity to learn about their hidden complexity made me choose Automobile
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Engineering
as my Bachelor’s degree.

After careful and sedulous research, I chose Sri
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Venkateswara
College of
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Engineering
for my undergraduate. The
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course
striking a perfect balance between practical and theoretical
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modules
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helped
me
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get
the basics right. The
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modules
on Thermodynamics, Fluid mechanics and Mechanics of machines brought me closer to my quest.
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The
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module
“Automotive Engines” in my second year of study backed up by the in-plant training I received from TVS Motor
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company
revealed the science under the hood. During my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
with them, I
was trained
by industrial experts on Engine Supporting Systems, Fuel Injection systems, Emission Standards, and other subsystems, all while
being exposed
to the industrial environment. The hands-on experience on Troubleshooting techniques, Dismantling and Assembly of an
Possible spelling mistake found.
IC
engine and a motorbike aided me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the knack of servicing a two-wheeler to a point where I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
servicing my motorbike by myself.

Not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
stopping with the
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two-wheelers
, I wanted to extend my grasp onto
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four-wheelers
.
Accordingly
, I made my way into an Internship with Ford Motor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Company
, where I
was lectured
by real-time professionals on Powertrain, Pollution Control, Vehicle Dynamics and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
other topics. Working on the ever-occupied workshop (service floor) honed my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Time
Management, Resource Management, Budgeting, Team Working
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skills
and other soft
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skills
along with the technical ability to tune and service a four-wheeler.

My perpetual desire for knowledge made me venture beyond the confines of my curriculum, pursuing a number of internships and
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courses
. One such Internship with Elite Techno Groups made me acquainted with the concepts of
Possible spelling mistake found.
FEA
and CFD. Developing an affinity towards Computer Aided
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Engineering
, I felt comfortable learning numerous CAD/CAM software such as
Possible spelling mistake found.
SolidWorks
, Autodesk Fusion 360,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Creo
Parametric and
Possible spelling mistake found.
Ansys
.

Considering my
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skill
set, I
was chosen
to lead the
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Design
Team of “
Possible spelling mistake found.
Traxion
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Offroading
”, a squad representing my undergraduate institution in
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Baja
SAE, an intercollegiate competition where undergraduate and graduate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
engineering
students from all over India
are challenged
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
design
and build an off-road vehicle. This experience enhanced my Leadership and Mentorship
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Skills
.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
I spent learning about
Possible spelling mistake found.
Automotives
and
being involved
with a variety of
Possible spelling mistake found.
CAE
software made me inclined to pursue my career in this field. In
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
, I picture myself as a proficient
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design
engineer working for a reputed Automotive manufacturer like Bentley, where I can bring about progress to my career while contributing to the ever-growing industry.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
after careful contemplation, I felt the need to pursue higher studies to
be upskilled
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
up with the growing trends of the industry.

Looking upon the prestigious car-makers like Bentley, Aston Martin,
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Rolls Royce
, it was my instinct to choose their Home as the destination for my masters. The United Kingdom, apart from being one of the
Possible spelling mistake. 'industrialised' is British English.
industrialised
countries with excellent infrastructure, offers a unique
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engineering
curriculum.
Particularly
the Automotive
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Engineering
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
, that impart unparalleled
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
, sought by leading car manufacturers stand unrivalled elsewhere in the world.

On the hunt for my dream, I came upon the ultimate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
that answers all my needs, offered by Coventry University. The industry-based curriculum and extensive facilities offered at your university
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it the perfect niche to strengthen my knowledge.
In Particular
, the distinct
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modules
in this
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course
like
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Engineering
Simulation and Analysis,
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Design
Principles and
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Practise
will bolster me with the in-demand
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design
and software
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skills
to attain the anticipated career goal.
Therefore
, I am applying to the Automotive
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Engineering
Consider using a more common abbreviation of this university degree.
MSc
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course
at your University. I look forward to being a part of your renowned institution and in the long-term, an expert in the automotive sector,
eventually
leading the way for a team of budding passionate engineers.
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IELTS essay statement of purpose write an essay about yourself

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
704 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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