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sports should not be a compulsory subject for all children. Children should be able to choose to study other subjects of sports if they don’t have good physical health. How true is this statement? What are some important factors that influence a child’s development?

sports should not be a compulsory subject for all children. Children should be able to choose to study other subjects of sports if they don’t have good physical health. How true is this statement? What are some important factors that influence a child’s development? q6gyr
Nowadays, people say that children should not be forced to do sports as a subject. Instead, it would be a better idea to let children who do not have good physical health freely choose their favourite subjects. In my point of view, I would argue that all children have to play at least one sport to relax and enhance their health. First of all, there is a lot of widespread evidence show that playing sports is one of the best ways to help children grow up strongly.
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IELTS essay sports should not be a compulsory subject for all children. Children should be able to choose to study other subjects of sports if they don’t have good physical health. How true is this statement? What are some important factors that influence a child’s development?

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  American English
2 paragraphs
87 words
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