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sports on television discourage young player

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In the era of technology, people have equipment that can provide information about any sports at any place, The television and many advanced technological devices are available which are useful to provide information about any sport from anywhere which are very useful. Nowadays, some young people start their sports journey from the television and imitate it in their life in various ways to be a perfect sports person. Many children have their idols which are aidful to be a good player of that particular sport. In some parts of the world, there are no amenities of some sports but by television, some young people can participate the game and make themselves confident about that game and it will be very useful for their future. There are also some drawbacks of the television such as, A child wants to play cricket and their favourite team is losing some matches continuously so that child will lose their hope to join that sports and make a bad image of the sport in their mind which will diminish the interest in the game. In some rural areas, the game playing facility is not available which is inconvenient for some people who want to play that sport. There are many rules and regulations in that sport which implied by the country which is not good for that sports person and it will ruin the carrier of that person for the particular game which is useless In a nutshell, there are many different mindsets from person to person which depends to create and destroy the future of that sportsperson
In the era of technology,
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people
have equipment that can provide information about any
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sports
at any place,

The
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television
and
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many
advanced technological devices are available which are useful to provide information about any
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sport
from anywhere which are
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very
useful. Nowadays,
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some
young
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people
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start
their
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sports
journey from the
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television
and imitate it in their life in various ways to be a perfect
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sports
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person
.
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Many
children have their idols which are
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aidful
to be a
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good
player of that particular
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sport
. In
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some
parts of the world, there are no amenities of
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some
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sports
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but
by
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television
,
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some
young
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people
can participate the game and
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make
themselves confident about that game and it will be
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very
useful for their future.

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also
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some
drawbacks of the
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television
such as, A child wants to play cricket and their
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favourite
team is losing
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some
matches
continuously
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so
that child will lose their hope to
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join
that
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sports
and
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make
a
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bad
image of the
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sport
in their mind which will diminish the interest in the game. In
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some
rural areas, the game playing facility is not available which is inconvenient for
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some
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people
who want to play that sport.

There are
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many
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rules
and regulations in that
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sport
which implied by the country which is not
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good
for that
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sports
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person
and it will ruin the carrier of that
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person
for the particular game which is useless

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many
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different
mindsets from
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person
to
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person
which
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depends
to create and
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destroy
the future of that sportsperson
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IELTS essay sports on television discourage young player

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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