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The graph below shows the amount of fast food consumed from 1975 to 2000

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The graph compares the consumption of junk food for teens in Australia over a 25 year period, between 1975 and 2000. Overall, the consumption of fish and chips declined over the provided period, whereas the amount of pizza and hamburgers that were eaten increased. In 1975, the most popular junk food with Australian adolescents was fish and chips, being eaten 100 times a year. This was far higher than Pizza and hamburgers, which were consumed approximately 5 times a year. However, apart from a brief rise again from 1980 to 1985, the consumption of fish and chips gradually declined over the 25 year timescale to finish at just under 40 in 2000. In sharp contrast to this, teenagers ate the other two fast foods at much higher levels. Pizza consumption increased gradually until it overtook the consumption of fish and chips in 1990. It then levelled off from 1995 to 2000. The biggest rise was seen in hamburgers as the occasions they were eaten increased sharply throughout the 70’s and 80’s, exceeding that of fish and chips in 1985. It finished at the same level as fish and chips began, with a consumption of 100 times a year.
The graph compares the
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of junk food for teens in Australia over a 25
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year
period, between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
, the
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of fish and chips declined over the provided period, whereas the amount of pizza and hamburgers that
were eaten
increased.

In 1975, the most popular junk food with Australian adolescents was fish and chips,
being eaten
100 times a
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year
. This was far higher than Pizza and hamburgers, which
were consumed
approximately 5 times a
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year
.
However
, apart from a brief rise again from 1980 to 1985, the
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consumption
of fish and chips
gradually
declined over the 25
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year
timescale to finish at
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under 40 in 2000.

In sharp contrast to this,
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teenagers
ate the other two
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fast
foods at much higher levels. Pizza
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consumption
increased
gradually
until it overtook the
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consumption
of fish and chips in 1990. It then levelled off from 1995 to 2000. The biggest rise was
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seen
in hamburgers as the occasions they
were eaten
increased
sharply
throughout the
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70’s
and
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80’s
, exceeding that of fish and chips in 1985. It finished at the same level as fish and chips began, with a
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of 100 times a
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.
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the amount of fast food consumed from 1975 to 2000

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198 words
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