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Sports in the economic boom

Sports in the economic boom eErjx
Yesterday, i read a book by economist about Sport in the economic boom. I felt a sense of pride about a fan of sport. When the economy boomed in the 1990s. Every countries in the world must to face to the pose a problem. The economy of developed countries are weankened and bring about all of developing countries are heavy influence. The economist and Government are surge of anger when thay have to resolve to major problem. That made another activities have difficult problem. Such as sport. Special is football. Although football was known as the king of sport. However, while the economy of the world was boomed so that it difficultly developed. In spite of that, the world champions carried on as did not happen anything. The matches were recorded so they got it on CD. Every year, many young people want to join in football club or national football team. You can see that, despite how the economy of the country has became whatever. The passion of young people made them never give up. That made a milion people in the world became to take up a sport and they were crazy about it.
Yesterday,
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i
read a book by economist about
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Sport
in the economic boom. I felt a sense of pride about a fan of
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sport
.
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When
the
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economy
boomed in the 1990s. Every
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countries
in the
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world
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must to
face to the pose a problem. The
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economy
of developed
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countries
are
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weankened
and bring about all of developing
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countries
are heavy influence. The economist and
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Government
are surge of anger when
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thay
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have to
resolve to major problem. That made another activities have difficult problem. Such as
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sport
. Special is
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football
. Although
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football
was known
as the king of
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sport
.
However
, while the
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economy
of the
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world
was boomed
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so
that it
difficultly
developed.
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In spite of
that, the
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world
champions carried on as did not happen anything. The matches
were recorded
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so
they
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got
it on CD. Every year,
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many
young
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people
want to
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join
in
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football
club or national
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football
team. You can
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see
that, despite how the
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economy
of the
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country
has
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became
whatever. The passion of young
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people
made them never give up. That made a
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milion
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people
in the
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world
became to take up a
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sport and
they were crazy about it.

IELTS essay Sports in the economic boom

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
196 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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