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Sports deserve a great deal of importance in our life. Discuss.

Sports deserve a great deal of importance in our life. Discuss. GApo
Nowadays, sports play a vital role in life. It keeps us fit as well as mentally active. It has several benefits to the health which are explained in the subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, besides academics, children should pay attention on other fun activities mainly on sports. In the current era, people have hectic schedule in their day to day life wherein, sports work as stress buster to them. Most of the youngster are addicted to play games on computer or mobile consequently they have sedentary life which leads to suffer from several diseases. Although, playing outdoor games help individual to develop mental as well as physical ability. For instance, by and large working people prefer to play sports activities such as badmindon, cricket, swimming and many more on weekends to relieve the stress as well as tension. Additionally, it is believed that a person involved in outdoor activities is more efficient in his work compares to the one who is not is active. Nowadays, Sports have gained great popularity all over the world moreover, numerous of people choose it as carteen. In addition, many countries are being recognised by the sports alteletes of the nation. For instance, a sport athelete named Hima Das who belongs to destitute family got name and fame by sports. Furthermore, the sports program or mathes should be organised by the government as well as sports authority thus, huge number of people get encourage towards it. To conclude, sports activity involve tremendous of benefits resulting in better physical as well as mental health. Moreover, it plays an essential role of entertainment in our lives.
Nowadays,
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sports
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play
a vital role in life. It
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keeps
us fit as
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well
as mentally active. It has several benefits to the health which are
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explained
in the subsequent paragraphs.

To
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begin
with,
besides
academics, children should pay attention on other fun
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activities
mainly
on
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sports
. In the
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current
era,
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people
have hectic schedule in their
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day to day
life wherein,
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sports
work as
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stress
buster to them. Most of the youngster
are addicted
to
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play
games on computer or mobile
consequently
they have sedentary life which leads to suffer from several diseases. Although, playing outdoor games
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help
individual to develop mental as
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well
as physical ability.
For instance
, by and large working
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people
prefer to
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play
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sports
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activities
such as
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badmindon
, cricket, swimming and
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many
more on weekends to relieve the
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stress
as
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well
as tension.

Additionally
, it
is believed
that a person involved in outdoor
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activities
is more efficient in his work compares to the one who is not is active. Nowadays,
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Sports
have gained great popularity all over the world
moreover
, numerous of
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people
choose it as
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carteen
.
In addition
,
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many
countries are being
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recognised
by the
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sports
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alteletes
of the nation.
For instance
, a
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sport
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athelete
named
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Hima
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Das
who belongs to destitute family
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got
name and fame by
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sports
.
Furthermore
, the
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sports
program or
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mathes
should be

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organised
by the
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government
as
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well
as
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sports
authority
thus
, huge number of
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people
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get
encourage towards it.

To conclude
,
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sports
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activity
involve tremendous of benefits resulting in better physical as
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well
as mental health.
Moreover
, it
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plays
an essential role of entertainment in our
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lives
.
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IELTS essay Sports deserve a great deal of importance in our life. Discuss.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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